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This was not the fanfic I had intended to write, the other one I am working on is still a work in progress.  I statred on this one and just had so much fun though.  I wanted to share it.

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They kissed in the darkness , a little cubby that was out of immediate view of anyone passing by. The armored man pressed the demure female against the wall, taking her in his mouth for a deep, sensual kiss, relishing in the sensations she caused in him. One hand tenderly stroked her cheek while the other carressed her bare arm. She felt so wonderful underneath him, that he dared to wonder if things might continue to proceed once she was a mage.


The Templar disengaged from the kiss, looking loving into the young apprentice's eyes. "You are so lovely, Vhrinn. But I think we should head up to the Harrowing chamber, lest Irving send someone to find us."


Their stolen moment was over, but still, neither of them were willing to move. "I agree. I loathe the idea of them sending me into the Fade, but it must be done."


"Promise that you'll resist the Demon, for me?" Cullen begged, taking her hands and massaging the knuckles with genuine affection, staring down at the sumptuous treat before him.


"Awww, and deny you the chance to run your sword through me? Perish the thought, my love." Vhrinn chuckled, stealing another amorous kiss. Cullen scooped her back in his arms, hugging her fiercely to his chest.


Cullen's heart swelled in his chest and beat against its confines vigorously. She loved him! This was proving to be the best day of his life. Now if they could just get through the Harrowing, he planned on making this the best day of her life.


"Pass the Harrowing, and I will get Greagoire to let me take you to the docks, and we can watch the moon rise. From the Lake, the moon looks like a gigantic pearl suspended in a sea of the deepest purple, accentuated with sparkling diamonds. You'll love the view." Cullen took a step away from the Initiate, although he was begining to miss her warmth already.


"Cullen! You'd really take me outside?" she gasped, a smile splitting her face. Her skin was like silken ivory, mahognany brown hair and chocolate eyes contrasted amazingly against the pale skin. Her lips and eyes were painted with a lavender hue, standing out against both the hair and face. This odd contrast made it seem that her eyes were piercing into your soul, but to him, it was enchanting.


He suspected that people were more unsettled by her tattoos than her makeup. To anyone outside the circle, she insisted that they were runes to increse the potency of her spells. They would shy away from the would-be mage and steer clear of her. But those inside the tower knew the truth. As a young initiate, a spell had backfired on her, leaving her faced marred in several places. So, she had her face permanently tattooed to cover up the scars. Cullen found that they added to her allure. Everything about her enchanted him.


"As long as you don't become an Abomination, I will do my best to convince Greagoire." Cullen dared a peek around the corner of their nook, scouting the hallways beyond. Certain that they would not be discovered, he took Vhrinn by the hand and led her out. Her excitement lit her face up as she followed the Templar a few steps before he let go of her hand.


"I promise, Cullen. I had no intentions of letting some. . .demon, infest my body."


"Good." He said, smiling back at her one last time. Charged as he was with bringing the mage, it was only fitting he lead the way. This was as much a test for him as it was for her, although the hardest part was hers. The prospect of having to run the woman he loved through the heart did not appeal to him however. Still, if she succeeded, he'd be standing around like a drooling idiot the entire time.


"Ah, here she is," Irvings old gravely voice seemed to fill the entire room. Vhrinn broke off from Cullen and went to the First Enchanter, while Cullen went to stand with the Templars. He donned his helmet, suddenly becoming a facelss armored man amoung many. Had Vhrinn not seen where he stood before he put his helmet out, she would not have been able to discern who was who.


Only Greagroire stood out, wearing no helmet himself. He was an aging Templar, hair full of grey as well as a neatly trimmed grey beard that lined the curvature of his well cut jaw. His brown eyes were aged and fading but still held a fireceness to them that told anyone that he could still cut down an apostate if it came to that. Due to his rank, he was afforded the liberty to attend the Harrowing to watch and observe.


"Come this way." Irving said, leading Vhrinn to a small pedestal with blue/white smoke wafting up from it. "This is the Harrowing, every mage must face it. You will enter the Fade and face a demon. You must resist it to pass your test."


Greagoire stepped forward. "Do not help her Irving. You know the rules, she must do this on her own." Vhrinn shot the elder templar a venomous stare. She hated the man. He always bickered with Irving over their differences, was the Chantry's lapdog, and made the mages lives miserable. As much as she hoped Cullen would succeed at his promise, she doubted that the man would be so forthcoming.


"Relax, Greagoire, and let the girl prove herself." Irving rebuked.


"Touch the flames when you are ready to begin, my dear." Irving said gentialy. Although he was First Enchnater, he was well loved because of his Grandfatherly nature. Kind to a child away from home for the first time, telling silly stories to ease the transition. Or scolding them when they avoided their lessons or responsibilities. He was always fair, never harsh, but still, the threat of his power seemed to loom in the eyes of an errant pupil, and they never really pushed him past his hospitality.


Vhrinn looked around the Harrowing Chamber one last time, taking in Irvings reassuring glances, and the cold stares of the Templars beyond. It was those armored men that made her fear failing in her task. They wouldn't hesitate to cut her body down, might even take delight in it, except Cullen of course. But he would not fail in his duty. Should she emerge as an Abomination, it would taste cold steel before it could so much as inhale a single breath.


That wasn't so bad, she admitted to herself. She'd be long dead anyways, and her body merely a vessel to the demon inside. Whether it still looked like her, or took on its true form didn't matter. She felt reassured that the Templars would see to it that it would not make it pass this chamber. Still, the thought of losing herself in the first place terrified her.


Vhrinn took a deep breath and approached the pedestal, stretching out her hand as she held in the air she had taken. The blue/white flame danced around eagerly, as if seeking her out. As they made contact, the blue/white light jumped to her hand, stinging her like a shock of lightning. She recoiled, but it was too late, the light had engulfed itself around her hand, quickly climbing up her arm.


It burned! Like Andraste flaming sword, every nerve was ablaze with angry sensation. She wanted to shake it off, but her arm refused to obey her command, and still, the light swarmed her body, consuming it, torching every fiber of her existance. As the tendrils at last reached her head, she could remember opening her mouth to scream. . .

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aw cullen has a girlfriend lol

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No idea why this forum hates me

I thought of this, and had a wonderful time writting it.  It is a little crude, I do apologize.  But I still hope you enjoy it.


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The Harrowing.



 
"We have prepared the Ritual." Irving said at last, emerging from the adjoining room. HIs dissheveled grey beard hung down to his chest on his wizened body. But as feebly as the First Enchanter moved, the man still held and air of power that noone in the room wished to challenge, least of all Vhrinn. Still, in this room, it was her that everyone was looking to for guidance.


"I trust you'll be going?" Irving prodded.


"No." Vhrinn smiled. Oh, she was devious, and this might work. "Jowan will."


"You trust too quickly, my dear. He is a Blood Mage, what if he tries to take control of the demon?"


Vhrinn scoffed. Wow, Irving had so little faith. "Well, the demon would be out of Conner then, no? And, there are. . ."her eyes scanned the room. "More than a dozen people here capable of cutting down one Abomination.


"Besides. This is Jowan's chance to atone."


"Very well then, Grey Warden." Irving said, reluctantly escorting Jowan to the pedestal containing the blue/white flame. Jowan looked uncertainly back at Vhrinn, who smiled reassuringly. Yes, his one and only chance at redemption. But either way, Connor would be saved, unless Jowan died at the demons' hands. Then, she'd have to kill the boy. . .No. She didn't want to think along those lines.


The blood mage looked at the pedestal uncertainly, then touched the flame. The blue/white light jumped to his hand and quickly consumed his body. In the next moment, his body slumped to the ground, his chest rising and falling in the heavy rhythym of sleep.


Vhrinn still held her mischievious grin on her face. So far, everything was falling into place nicely. Killing two doves with one stone, as the saying went. Alistair, curious about her exuberance, quietly whispered in her ear.


"What are you so happy about?"


"WHen it's over, you'll see." Unpleased with such a evasive answer, he shrugged and went to stand next to Wynne, who was giving her such an unpleasant look. Had she already figured out Vhrinn's scheme? If so, why had she not said anything yet? And, would she forgive her?


"How long are we to wait?" Isolde asked, the ever worried mother pacing around like a caged mouse.


"As long as it takes. If, perchance, Jowan does give into the demon, I do not want to risk not being here and letting it loose." Everyone nodded approvingly, except Isolde who went back to picking at her fingernails worridly. Figuring it would be better to get rid of the estranged mother, Vhrinn whispered something to Leliana. The bard smiled and went to Isolde, taking her by the shoulders and guiding her from the room.


"Why you poor thing, you look like you haven't slept in days. Why don't we go get you tidied up. A bath, with scented oils. . ."Lelianna's voice faded away as she cooed at the distraught Mother. Isolde made no objections, but it was most likely due to Lelianna's caring nature. Still, it was one less thing to worry about, should it come down to having to kill the boy.


The minutes ticked by, each one dragging on slower than the previous minute. Nearly an hour had passed before Jowan began to stir. Everyone let out a sigh of relief as not only he seemed to be fine, but showed no signs of being an Abomination. Vhrinn had to hold back the cry of excitement. Her plan had worked!


"It is done," he said wearily, taking Vhrinn's hand as she helped him up. She remembered her first time into the Fade, how exhuasted she had been, and how he'd tortured her after her Harrowing. She felt like doing the same, but it wouldn't be so appropriate in front of all these 'onlookers'. She'd have to plan her revenge later.


"Now what?" Irving said, suspecting a reason to why Vhrinn had chosen Jowan.


"Well, seems to me we have a bit of a dilemma on our hands. Jowan is officially a mage, so he needs to return with you back to the Tower. . ."Vhrinn could barely keep her face straight as she finally revealled her nefarious plot.


"What!?" Irving roared. "He-he-he is a Blood Mage. He is no circle mage!"


"Well, I beg to differ. He did, after all, complete his Harrowing, did he not?"


Irving opened his mouth to protest, but then closed it after realizing what exactly had just happened. Wynne, too, seemed like she was going to object, and thought better of it. Even Jowan looked shocked. But, he had indeed fullfilled the requirments of becoming a true Mage in the Circle's eyes.


"He went into the Fade, faced a demon, and resisted it. And in the process, saved a little boys' life. Quite remarkable, if I might say so. I didn't save any boys in my Harrowing." Vhrinn said, flashing Jowan a smile. Realizing what she had done for him, he smiled gratefully back at her.


"What about his crimes against the Arl?" Teagan said, cutting to the heart of the problem.


"Yes. And hence the dilemma. He is a circle Mage now, and only falls under Circle jurisdiction. However, he committed a heinous act of violence against the arl. But, given his story, he did not believe his actions were treasonous. As such, he should remain here, as a prisoner until the Arl recovers. Then, the Arl will determine what his punishment shall be."


"And what about his phylactery? He destroyed it." Irving conviently left out a minor detail. Jowan hadn't destroyed his phylactery, she had. Back then, she knew nothing of his dabblilngs into Blood Magic.
 

"Its just a vial of blood. Take a new one. And, send a Templar here to guard him while he remains a prisoner. Cullen, I believe would make an excellent choice. That way, he would still fall under Chantry supervision as well."


"Well." Irving began, a slow smile spreading across his face. Was he impressed she had outwitted him? "Seems you have everything well in hand. Very well. Have him taken to his cell, I shall send word to Greagorie and have a Templar sent here immediatly. "


The elder Mage began to hobble his way out of the room, pausing briefly by Vhrinn. "Well played."


"Jowan!" Vhrinn called, stopping her friend before he could be led away. The Dark haired male stopped to look at her. "I just wanted to make a few things clear.


"First off. You are never, ever to do Blood Magic again. I will have explicit instructions sent that you are to go nowhere without a Templar to always watch over your magical proceedings. Should you ever be caught 'dabbling' in the forbidden arts again, I will make sure they brand you. No getting out of it. You've been given a second chance. Don't squander it."


"Vhrinn, you are a true friend. You bless me by being so generous. Fear not, I shall never betray your trust again." Jowan replied before the Castle guard escorted him out of the room.

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Awww, Cullen's girlfriend returned home and Saved the Tower...  Happy reunions all around.

I didn't add this before, but comments are welcome, as are critiques.  I can take it!  Bring it on!  :)

Anyways, the next part.

P.S. I should be able to post on fanfic by tomorrow.  These are just snippets for me to play around with.

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Cullen waited as Vhrinn finished speaking to the First Enchanter, Irving. She was recruiting the Mages to join her army against the Blight under an ancient treaty obliging their services. To his complete surprise, Greagoire didn't seem to be opposing the declaration. At Ostagar, he'd been adamant that seven had been too many, Vhrinn was demaning almost an entire squad of mages. Unleashed without Chantry supervision, and Greagoire wasn't even mulling about the conversation.

As Vhrinn and Irving finished talking, Cullen quickly darted over to get Vhrinn's attention before she left. She was just about to head out the doors when he'd caught up to her. He wanted to say something then, but all he could do was hope she'd read the look in his eyes and understand. By Andrastes' Grace, she had, signaling to her friends to continue on.

Alister turned his head to follow Vhrinn and the other Templar as they moved off to a private alcove to speak. He wished he had said something to Cullen before he'd gotten to Vhrinn, wished he'd have told him to let it go. He'd seen the way he had been looking at her as she and Irving talked, but he hadn't acted on it, and now, it was too late for the Templar.

Everyone's head in the lobby turned as Vhrinn smartly smacked Cullen across the face. They hadn't even engaged in whatever conversation Cullen had in mind. The Templar raised a hand to his stinging cheek, and everyone went back to their buisness, trying to pretend that nothing had happened. Vhrinn eyed the Templar angrily for one last moment before spinning on her heel and storming out of the Tower.

She didn't bother to bark an order at Alister to follow her, or scold him on not following her directions. Her eyes were dark orbs of firey contention at the moment, and he wasn't about to knock on that haornet's nest. Even Cullen seemed reluctant to follow the tempest that was Vhrinn.

"Will. . .will she ever forgive me?" Cullen asked Alistair, hoping to alleviate his guilt through another venue. It was not Alistair place to forgive this man in her name.

"Vhrinn is no longer a Circle Mage, she is a Grey Warden. She will not be around the Tower to hold a grudge, or forgive you. Take that as you will." Alistair replied. Cullen frowned, he'd had hoped for more sympathy from a fellow Templar.

"Tell her. . .tell her I'm sorry. Please?" Cullen hastily begged, seeing the Templar Warden about to leave.

Alistair stopped, looking out at the bright sunlight in the partial opening of the Tower doors. After what had felt like an eternity inside the Tower, he was looking forward to seeing the sun again. Abominations, the Fade, enthalled Templars. Just being able to sit atop a sunny slope full of flowers and birds seemed like the perfect way to relax. Up until they got jumped by some more Darkspawn.

Alistair sighed at the shattered image of his would be respite. To Cullen, it appeared to be a sigh in response to him.


"No." The Warden replied, continuing before Cullen could interject. "If she had wanted to hear your apology, she'd have stayed to listen to it."

And left the crestfallen Templar behind, shutting the Iron doors to block out Cullen's misery.

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Cullen is hideuous, though. Just kidding! As a fellow Fan-Fic writer, I have to say: Well done! I crave more.

PS - People are giving you a bad time? That's hardly fair. I found this writing fantastic! Consider yourself subscribed. :)

Modifié par The Gay Warden, 14 janvier 2010 - 05:04 .


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i crave more Cullen lol
he deserves better lol jkjk

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Whee! My Fanfic site is up and going.

Here's the next installment on Vhrinn.



http://www.fanfictio...rinn_at_Ostagar

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finally a story where the girl isnt all lovey with alistar lol

at least for now *wink*wink*

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wait what did cullen do? why's he get the smack?

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frostajulie wrote...

wait what did cullen do? why's he get the smack?


Image IPB  That will be explained in another snippet.  I just have to write it.

But now that I think of it. . . .*rushes off ot her doodle pad*

Guess I should get writting.

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Ok, Frosta asked why cullen got slapped. I think he got off easy. Here it is!



http://www.fanfictio...Cullen_vs_Mages

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Very well done! I like it.

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ty Tallon!

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You are most welcome =)

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MarcusDeVarro wrote...

finally a story where the girl isnt all lovey with alistar lol
at least for now *wink*wink*


He's like girlie kryptonite or something. :P

And btw, liking the story too :)

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I know its been a long time since I posted anything. It's, again, kinda crude. But this kinda deatils events that happen after the Archdemon dies.



http://www.fanfictio...34/1/Aftermaths

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I posted a snippet of my main character, Ahnettei (Ahne, as she is addressed in the story.) and Sten fighting.



As always, I enjoy comments both good and bad.



http://www.fanfictio...81035/1/Actions

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I liked the duel story but I loved the aftermath one! I want to see how Vhrinn continues to deal with those wretched Orlesians! I hope she makes them eat their dirty silk pantaloons.

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Thanks! I will work on that. Been shifting my focus back on to my main story, I lost all my data on my Pri HDD yesterday, which contained ALL my stories. ALL! So I thought I had lost the main story I had been working on. I was really close to tears. Seeing as I would never be able to recreate that Fic.



Then my friend (whom I had sent a portion of the rough draft to) swooped in to save the day and sent that rough draft back to me.



My Hero!!



So now I have been engrossing myself on at least completeing the first chapter. So, as other projects pop into my head I wil work on them, but please not that I may, or may not get around to other installments of Vhrinn.



But thank you for the kind words.

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Wanted to send out a quick thank you to everyone who has replied and left comments on my FF stories, and those who have added me to their watch lists. I was almost over-whelmed by the number of emails I had to the people tracking my stories. I am humbled, thank you so much.

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Here is another Vhrinn snippet. Definetly not for the Alistair haters. I do hope you enjoy it.

http://www.fanfictio...044/1/The_dirge

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Oh, geez! Wow! Thank you for all who have again, added me to your favorite authors and such! I am honored. burnign a hole through my gmail account *smiles*



I am glad you are enjoying my works, the Vhrinn stuff is crude, but it also helps me out for teh main fic I am reading.



Comments, good or bad, are always welcome. And when I get more, I will post them. Thank you all again.

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tevikolady wrote...

Here is another Vhrinn snippet. Definetly not for the Alistair haters. I do hope you enjoy it.

http://www.fanfictio...044/1/The_dirge


I'll say what I said on ffnet about this story, sad fic is sad :(  Keep on writing!

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ty Tasmen.