Ever since the beta files were released back in November 2011, I've had the idea to create a rewrite of Mass Effect 3. The plot seemed, at the time, too awful for my tastes.
Then ME3 came out. I had the opportunity to properly explore the game itself, and it turned out to be quite good (except for the really obvious part). However, my plan to rewrite ME3 was still active. Modifications were made. Now, I was planning to modify the plot, and write a longer version, instead of pulling a completely original plot out my ass. That thing's difficult for me.
Unfortunately, the crazy amount of ideas speeding around my head is delaying the process. So, I'd also like to ask for your help. Any contributions would be appreciated.
Thanks, in advance.
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The Mass Effect 3 Re-Write Thread
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Gemini Freak
, avril 07 2013 06:06
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#2
Posté 08 avril 2013 - 02:37
AustereLemur799
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Without commenting on the obvious stuff - plenty of people to do that; I honestly believe that the hologram of the god-child should have been Avina - it makes perfect sense (or at least more understandable than what we got).
Also, what is the point in killing off characters like Emily Wong on Twitter. If that was just because the devs couldn't hire the voice actor; it's stupid. These threads are for improvements, and we should note everything - no matter how small.
I can't say for absolute certain; but the original ME3 ending was said to have over 12 endings based on your choices throughout the trilogy.
Credit to the writers though; I don't wanna complain - it's a futile exercise now anyways.
Also, what is the point in killing off characters like Emily Wong on Twitter. If that was just because the devs couldn't hire the voice actor; it's stupid. These threads are for improvements, and we should note everything - no matter how small.
I can't say for absolute certain; but the original ME3 ending was said to have over 12 endings based on your choices throughout the trilogy.
Credit to the writers though; I don't wanna complain - it's a futile exercise now anyways.
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Posté 09 avril 2013 - 01:49
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Okay, well start off with the trial obviously, with a Batarian persecutor trying to damn Shepard, with plenty of time to characterize James, the VS, and Earth.
Replace Allers with Emily Wong
Keep Cerberus from complete indoctrination and terminal stupidity
Have Jacob and Miranda play important parts of story.
Retcon Udina's coup and terminal stupidity.
Add in Garrus' dad and family on Palaven, and explore the relationship he has with them.
Make Liara's Shadow Brokering useful.
Add in a few more Reaper Battles, and exposition.
Retcon the Rachni Reapers
Expanded Battle for Earth with War Assets
And completely rewrite the ending to either incorporate the indoctrination story, or Maruader Shields storyline
As a suggestion.
Replace Allers with Emily Wong
Keep Cerberus from complete indoctrination and terminal stupidity
Have Jacob and Miranda play important parts of story.
Retcon Udina's coup and terminal stupidity.
Add in Garrus' dad and family on Palaven, and explore the relationship he has with them.
Make Liara's Shadow Brokering useful.
Add in a few more Reaper Battles, and exposition.
Retcon the Rachni Reapers
Expanded Battle for Earth with War Assets
And completely rewrite the ending to either incorporate the indoctrination story, or Maruader Shields storyline
As a suggestion.
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Posté 09 avril 2013 - 06:00
Gemini Freak
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SAmaster01 wrote...
Okay, well start off with the trial obviously, with a Batarian persecutor trying to damn Shepard, with plenty of time to characterize James, the VS, and Earth.
Replace Allers with Emily Wong
Keep Cerberus from complete indoctrination and terminal stupidity
Have Jacob and Miranda play important parts of story.
Retcon Udina's coup and terminal stupidity.
Add in Garrus' dad and family on Palaven, and explore the relationship he has with them.
Make Liara's Shadow Brokering useful.
Add in a few more Reaper Battles, and exposition.
Retcon the Rachni Reapers
Expanded Battle for Earth with War Assets
And completely rewrite the ending to either incorporate the indoctrination story, or Maruader Shields storyline
As a suggestion.
Boy, do ya have any idea about the scale of the rewrites???
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Posté 12 avril 2013 - 05:18
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SAmaster01 wrote...
Have Jacob and Miranda play important parts of story.
Yeah, just make Miranda take over as head of Cerberus during the assault on Cronos Station [/sarcasm]
Wait, What?
#6
Posté 13 avril 2013 - 06:55
MyChemicalBromance
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At the end of the Arrival event, Shepard and those who followed him braced for the war they believed to only be months away... but it never came. The days came, and went, and came, and went, but none of them brought the Reapers. As time passed, Shepard's involvement in the destruction of the Alpha Relay became widely known across the galaxy. Those who gave him the benefit of the doubt suggested that Cerberus may have tricked him, those that didn't weren't so kind.
Eventually Shepard had to go into hiding, as the Council deployed the entire might of the Spectres to bring the apparent rogue into justice.
Two years have passed, and the invasion has still yet to come. The entire galaxy thinks Shepard to be delusional at best, and a mass murderer at worst. But one man isn't ready to give up on Shepard yet. In what may prove to be a suicidal endeavor, he embarks in pursuit of Shepard, with the goal of bringing him evidence that the invasion began much longer than two years ago.
Anderson checked his thermal scope for the third time in the last minute. No readings. He'd been following Shepard's tracks across the galaxy for the last year. Former crew, Cerberus, and even the Spectres (many of whom had written him off as dead) were no help. A tip from the Shadow Broker had led him to the frozen tundra's of Noveria's south pole. Hiding here was tantamount to suicide; not even the Nathak ventured this far south. This of course meant it was ever more likely that Shepard was here.
He checked the thermal scope again "Nothing" he muttered. He'd checked the entire sector, and reluctantly let himself accept that it was time to move on. As he turned to leave, something slid past his boot under the snow. Suddenly he was in the air, then down, then stiff as a statue. "Stasis Field" he muttered through his shearing teeth. Suddenly he was loose, but still restrained. His captor turned him towards himself. The Rachni Brood Warrior eyed his prey carefully, then dragged him under.
When Anderson came to, he was in front of a small pre-fab beneath a short cliff. There were more Rachni now, all waiting near the structure. He was still being dragged. As he neared the structure, a figure appeared in the door way. Shepard. "Nice guard dogs" choked out Anderson, still gripped by his captors. "They keep away the riff raff." Shepard retorted. Another figure emerged from the dwelling. Jack held an M-6 Carnifex half a meter from Anderson's temple. "He's with us everyone" warned Shepard.
Anderson wasted no time. "Shepard *cough* you need to come back. The Council's been indoctrinated-they've been indoctrinated the entire time-the entire time." Without stopping to clarify, he continued "The Reapers are using them to prepare this galaxy for slaughter- a thousand times more efficient than that which consumed the Protheans." "We-- we need you Shepard."
Shepard walked from the dwelling and starred at the frozen sky "Well Jack, [signature musical theme building proudly but wavering] you think we can do it again?" "Shepard-- I.."
"You know what I think?" exclaimed Shepard.
"I think it's just..."
[Turns to Camera]
"The Mass Effect."
BAAH DA NA NA NA NUUHHHH NUH NUHHHH NA NUUHHH NUHHH AHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Eventually Shepard had to go into hiding, as the Council deployed the entire might of the Spectres to bring the apparent rogue into justice.
Two years have passed, and the invasion has still yet to come. The entire galaxy thinks Shepard to be delusional at best, and a mass murderer at worst. But one man isn't ready to give up on Shepard yet. In what may prove to be a suicidal endeavor, he embarks in pursuit of Shepard, with the goal of bringing him evidence that the invasion began much longer than two years ago.
Anderson checked his thermal scope for the third time in the last minute. No readings. He'd been following Shepard's tracks across the galaxy for the last year. Former crew, Cerberus, and even the Spectres (many of whom had written him off as dead) were no help. A tip from the Shadow Broker had led him to the frozen tundra's of Noveria's south pole. Hiding here was tantamount to suicide; not even the Nathak ventured this far south. This of course meant it was ever more likely that Shepard was here.
He checked the thermal scope again "Nothing" he muttered. He'd checked the entire sector, and reluctantly let himself accept that it was time to move on. As he turned to leave, something slid past his boot under the snow. Suddenly he was in the air, then down, then stiff as a statue. "Stasis Field" he muttered through his shearing teeth. Suddenly he was loose, but still restrained. His captor turned him towards himself. The Rachni Brood Warrior eyed his prey carefully, then dragged him under.
When Anderson came to, he was in front of a small pre-fab beneath a short cliff. There were more Rachni now, all waiting near the structure. He was still being dragged. As he neared the structure, a figure appeared in the door way. Shepard. "Nice guard dogs" choked out Anderson, still gripped by his captors. "They keep away the riff raff." Shepard retorted. Another figure emerged from the dwelling. Jack held an M-6 Carnifex half a meter from Anderson's temple. "He's with us everyone" warned Shepard.
Anderson wasted no time. "Shepard *cough* you need to come back. The Council's been indoctrinated-they've been indoctrinated the entire time-the entire time." Without stopping to clarify, he continued "The Reapers are using them to prepare this galaxy for slaughter- a thousand times more efficient than that which consumed the Protheans." "We-- we need you Shepard."
Shepard walked from the dwelling and starred at the frozen sky "Well Jack, [signature musical theme building proudly but wavering] you think we can do it again?" "Shepard-- I.."
"You know what I think?" exclaimed Shepard.
"I think it's just..."
[Turns to Camera]
"The Mass Effect."
BAAH DA NA NA NA NUUHHHH NUH NUHHHH NA NUUHHH NUHHH AHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Modifié par MyChemicalBromance, 13 avril 2013 - 07:03 .
