David7204 wrote...
You should probably make the whole Miranda spiel a little less obvious.
Well, it plays a very big part of my story David. It's how
I envision the ending. The overall concepts are there too. I'm not saying that she should be the key to everyone's victory. But she is definitely the key to my Shepard's success.
I got the idea from the episode of Star Trek (TOS) "This Side of Paradise" where the paradise flower causes people to lose their inhibitions and cares and live a hedonistic life.
The entire Enterprise, save for Kirk, is hit by the spores from the flower, causing them to abandon their duties and leave for the planet. Kirk is the only one left. Eventually he too gets hit with the spores, and he proceeds to follow suit with the rest of the crew, but as he's about to leave, he reminisces about his career and feels a wave of incredible anger at the thought of abandoning his beloved Enterprise. This sudden wave of rage at the thought of abandoning his love for his ship kills the spores and Kirk realizes that strong, passionate, even violent emotion kills the spores.
I adapted it for Mass Effect. Shepard is able to fight the mental attack by clinging to the thought of Miranda, and believing in her. His berserk button if you will.
It's in other media too. Vader has the feelings for Luke, Luke has the feelings for Leia, Leia has the feelings for Han. Vader is unable to watch Luke suffer, Luke is unwilling to allow Vader or the Emperor to harm or turn Leia, Leia resists Prince Xizor's mental and sexual advances (even when he's using pheromones that are almost unresistable to females) by holding on to her love for Han.