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[Redbelle]

Erk! Need to rewrite a section when Rothan and Rea leave the medical bay. Only thing to note from th Rewrite.

Rothan is given Wylds pistol and is told of where she got it from.

Plus he gains the new nickname..... Babe.

Modifié par Redbelle, 14 septembre 2013 - 03:33 .

[Redbelle]

That's fine. WE can do that. So Wyld head's to Sullies without Rea.

You can probably write that they intended to, then REa get's sidetracked by bikes and Wyld mentions that they are the ones they picked up, and she shuold talk to Mako comamnde Patterson who can be tinkering.

[Kel Riever]

I'm all screwed up, because I'm out with just my phone right now. Can't read your latest or write until I get back later. Will regroup then. Thanks for keeping it going

[Redbelle]

3 posts. had a massive keyboard bashing session, got it all up. And still missed the pistol. Will update later but have to cut down bean plants for autumn.

Laters!

[FuriousFelicia]

Beautiful Redbelle. I wanted Naomi to show her teeth already. Now the curtain is up.

My next move: Zia goes to see Sully, makes arrangements for Jan's amor, helps Sully and gets all messed up in the process, she leaves for showers.

Redbelle please get back to me through PM on momma so I can throw her in the mix as well if you want

[Redbelle]

I've put something up for Sully. Let me now if you want to go ahead and I'll pull it down so you can put up your section. It sounds like Zia needs more context driven dialogue than I provided to drive her to the showers.

Modifié par Redbelle, 14 septembre 2013 - 04:43 .

[FuriousFelicia]

I'll get on it as soon as I get from work. So you can relax till tomorrow. Anyway it won't be a long one..just enough to set up the stage for things to come.

@Kel
Do you think Rea and Zia should bump into each other at the Armory? I would like Zia to leave before Wyld shows up. Since it seems both Rea and Jan are comming to the Armory together...maybe Wyld can get delayed by some thing..just for Zia to have time to leave before she's there.

[Kel Riever]

Yes, Rea and Zia should at least see each other. I still haven't gotten a chance to read a thing. Reading now.

[Kel Riever]

Okay...I finally had the chance to read. Now I need a chance to write. Here' s some general location stuff that is coming. Rea, Rothan, Wyld, and well, Patterson, are going to end up at the armory. There will be orders place. Some conversation but very introductory stuff (RedBelle actually knocked that fairly well out of the park already). Rea will ultimately leave the armory. Now here's where it might get a little weird, but should work out. Zia and Rea are going to see each other, but Wyld won't be seeing Zia. Patterson will probably just fade off somewhere, and I'm going to leave Wyld, Rothan and Sully (and of course some other of our mischevious youth) together, yacking.

What Rea is going to request in armor, and um, custom items, given the need for Sully to pull things from all over the place with spare parts, will take time so Rea will have to come back at a later date and no doubt, whatever Wyld is doing with armor...well it will help if they are in the same area together when Sully goes through their respective up-gunning. Sounds like Wyld, in particular, is going to get something swank-tastic!

Will be typing soon-ish

[Redbelle]

Everyone gathered around the Iron Suzie.

"How long's she been in there"? Asked one.

"The process takes time". Said another.

Suddenly the Suzie cracked open and the doors opened emiting an outpouring gas and steam. A figure emerged. Clad in red and gold armor. A power core pulsing in the chest plate

Wyld held up her arms in triumph. "I am Iron-Jan"!

[Redbelle]

Having Rothan in the armoury with Wyld and Sully would be a better point to go into the whole, here's the gun your Asari friend and here's what she said about someone called Baby.

I've gotta get that in there somehow.

[playoff52]

Thanks guys, I had to edit some of that. Was playing multiplayer for mood and so my focus was shifting back and forth.

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

RE: The Beam Run -- No, let's have our infiltrators do their job first. Infiltrate, and clear the path. Shall we do it Fallout style? It's obvious Rea's an infiltrator. Who else wants to run up and shove a grenade in the pocket of a Marauder? Or can you guys be quiet enough to tiptoe around the back and go up the beam?

I mean I don't want to be anywhere near Shepard. Everyone that gets near Shepard dies.

OT -- Now I just finished Rannoch without Tali (poor Tali), Legion is all "the organics are unreliable. We can help you take earth." I'm here to tell you that Raan is gangsta. She doesn't mess around with no stupid knife. Boom b**ch! "I knew that thing would turn on us."

Okay, back to the beam run. So I say we do it on our own. We come in from the opposite side and we come in quiet. Let them be occupied taking down that reaper. The more attention Shepard's side pays to that reaper, The more attention the reapers pay to them, and the less attention they pay to us. We'll get there before Harbinger does.

[Redbelle]

FuriousFelicia wrote...

Beautiful Redbelle. I wanted Naomi to show her teeth already. Now the curtain is up.

My next move: Zia goes to see Sully, makes arrangements for Jan's amor, helps Sully and gets all messed up in the process, she leaves for showers.

Redbelle please get back to me through PM on momma so I can throw her in the mix as well if you want

When I thought about how to pitch the reveal, I kept thinking about how much I'd have to explain if Wyld told Naomi.

I couldn't think of a reason why she would tell her at that time. It was her idea to keep the relationship from Nay. Having her reverse that out of guilt was an explanation, but one that would hurt her. So Wyld couldn't tell her because circumstance dictated that she had no reason to tell her.

Then there's the little cues that have been dropped. And Nay's apparent overlooking of all of them.

Then I thought..... What if she's not overlooking, but just pretending they mean nothing, until the evidence stacked up to the point where she couldn't ignore it anymore.

I liked how the scene swung back and forth. Nay trying to push Wyld away. Then seeing that Jan needed something fro her which she gave in emotional support.

Then a swing back as Naomi asks Wyld to be honest with her regarding her suspicions.

That slap, btw, came out as a 15 on a d20. So it was a good one. Well above average.

[Redbelle]

Babylon's back.

And she's really miffed at the whole marriage thing Wyld made her go through. So much that her stance on Alien's has become a little more polarised.

Still, she's doing her job. Promoting the Tee-Eff and making Wilson Armitage look goooood.

Because....... Armitage may be next in line of......... No. Can't say it yet. It's to horrible to contemplate.

[Redbelle]

Starting to look at Armour ideas.

Might be going a little off base from the ME universe. Though will attempt to keep the streamlined look.

Getting some good ideas..... features need to be ironed out and how they will apply to how Wyld works.

The ultra marine armour however? If Zia walked up to her in that, she'd hear this tinny voice coming from inside...... "I....can't.... move"!

[Kel Riever]

I sent you armor ideas by PM. You might not like em, but I sent em.

POSTED! Okay, after an insane day, the piece I posted took 3 1/2 hours to write. Cause either I am slow or just edited too much (which, yes, might be sad if you find copious mistakes). Or just because I had to include stuff which we totally need and did not want to screw it up.

Furious F, I hope I didn't hold you up too much and go ahead and post your Zia thing before our collaborative. RedBelle and Khambilo, I hope I didn't screw it up for you. SJ and FavoriteH...okay, still wait. I'm getting to it. playoff52....Its just good to see you post! HAH!

Onward and upward. Be glad Rea missed Terra Firma. Be really glad Artemis missed it. And really, REALLY glad Clanless isn't there yet! But still, nicely done as usual.

One more sorry to say it took so long, l o n g

[Redbelle]

For those who want to try their hand at Pro Human Propaganda, feel free to write something for Babylon who is now loose on the field with her hubby Volus and his two assistant's.

Long story.... It's all Wyld's fault.

The tone for the news piece's is thus

Paint humans, in general, in a good light.
Elevate the profile of Terra Firma and Wilson Armitage in a positive way.
Villify the Reapers.
Play down other alien involvment that has helped the war effort.
Don't reveal anything to classifed.
Get in and out before the MP's realise what's going on.

As for why the Volus are helping in this way..... there are many reasons. Of which, the most pertinent comes down too..... Babylon now wears the trousers in the relationship, despite what the initial agreement going into the marriage is.

@Kel

I got your PM about the armour. I'm going to stay tight lipped on what recommendations I'm getting, but have started drawing the figure to start layering designs upon.

The Valkyr may never see the light of day at this rate. I may have to take the rough and post that up at some point as a WIP

Modifié par Redbelle, 14 septembre 2013 - 11:22 .

[FuriousFelicia]

Never mind-_-

Modifié par FuriousFelicia, 15 septembre 2013 - 04:26 .

[Kel Riever]

Its all cool. I have provided a bridge for you. We can rebuild it! Oh, and we will.

[Kel Riever]

Just to everyone doing work, pretty inspirational so you know. At least as far as I'm concerned.

I won't be posting up before FF does a part, and I can't for most of today as my schedule is a bit full. But I will be able to get cracking later tonight and even if you don't see me post, I assure you work is getting done behind the scenes.

[FuriousFelicia]

@Kel

Thanks buddy

Btw check your PM

[Kel Riever]

Will check. Just popping up this post to say Zia and Rea are going to be sequestered for their next part together. Hopefully ff and I can jam on this relatively soon

[Redbelle]

In case it's relevant, I'm writing a scene with Wyld and Sully that has dragged Rothan back into the armoury temporarily to address the issue of the gun Wyld carries.

The plan is to drag him in, then kick him back out, with some stuff happening in between.

If that impact's with anyone can you let me know?

[Kel Riever]

I don't think that does for Rea or Zia. For Rothan, I would guess you could ask Khambilo, though I don't know of anything that would interfere with.

The FF and me part is in my hands now and I'm starting to put a close to final draft together for FF to look over. With great hope it will be up soon, although I will need to get a couple of hours of work in here before it can be sent off. Here I go.