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[Kel Riever]

Hooray for entries!

I'll write again. The base may be blown but there's more to come. Goodbye Pub. We loved you. Who knows, maybe not everthing was destroyed when the base was blown....?

Lucy was my favs so seeing her still around makes me happy. When I write, the war will continue....

[Redbelle]

Oh, Ohohoh.....

If you happened to write that an alliance flag survived, bit battered but still standing on a pole.......

I ask because Baldurjack may happen across the remains of the base at some point...... And he needs a flag.

The man has a mecha-steed and a rapier...... he just needs to colours of the Alliance and he's set.

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

Redbelle: asspull here. Underneath the debris of the armory, Baldurjack spies a tattered corner of the Alliance banner that Sully had hanging on the wall. It was near the entrance, and the debris over it is not that heavy. He can lift it off, and there it is. The tattered Alliance colors he needs. He takes a deep breath and his chest expands with Alliance pride.

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

Kel, you have to have the Thresher Maw speak.... "Assuming control of this form! I will show you true power!"

[Redbelle]

Funny you mention talking Reapers..... I'm about to introduce the concept with a Reaper in the mall.

[Redbelle]

"How many Survivors remain for evacuation"? Momma asked Zia.

"Eleven"! Called Zia before she heard a scream and cheer. "Make that ten"! Another scream and another cheer followed. "Nine. Dammit this is getting ridiculous"!

Modifié par Redbelle, 09 décembre 2013 - 07:55 .

[Redbelle]

For a moment, when the brother and sister were mentioned, I though Kel was bringing back Private's Red and Belle.

They are probably still locked in a blacked out Mako somewhere, waiting for someone to let them out.

[Kel Riever]

Red and Belle are totally yours.

I could have named mine Kel and Riever....

Anyway, yes, let me PM you when I have the chance Red with questions. The flag didn't go in but will if you can wait a bit (and I can remember...) but I do intend one more very brief scene with Rob. Other people need some attention first so it may not happen to mid or late week.

Patterson died with his Mako, swallowed whole before it perished, and then rose again.  Wong is out of action one way or another, as well; don't expect more from the guy who was under a flying Valkyr.  There actually would have been more deaths, but the pacing has been not as fast as I thought. It is coming, though, so again, if someone should be saved....say so now!

The main characters are not on the menu, though, not without author permission even if that author isn't currently writing. That's for me, at least. Still, there are a lot of names out there, and it is deadly. I hope it continues to entertain is all.

Modifié par Kel Riever, 09 décembre 2013 - 10:16 .

[Redbelle]

I'm getting to moving Wyld and co out into the fight. I have a few plans about how Wyld deals with the processor. Sadly she has no nukes or big explosives so she'll have to think laterally.

As for how Wyld intends to deal with the small Reaper army camping outside where the processor is coveting Reapers for praise......

Reaper - I have an army!

Wyld - We have a Naomi.

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

I knew we should have brought another nuke with us so we really could have taken "off and nuke(d) the entire site from orbit.... It's the only way to be sure."

[Kel Riever]

A Cain is good, really good. Something bigger might be needed, though. Even a cain doesn't destroy a Thresher Maw in one go....but you know that

So....the bridge thing....I know it is taking its time because honestly I

a) Want to write the other characters and show the war.
Though it can't last forever, I admit a bunch of stall mode on to hear back from Kham and or FF, and it has been a couple of weeks now. I hope if Kham can't come back soon, he won't mind me writing Rothan....

Anyway, the primary goal is to keep it entertaining and so that is foremost in my mind.

[Redbelle]

Kel Riever wrote...

A Cain is good, really good. Something bigger might be needed, though. Even a cain doesn't destroy a Thresher Maw in one go....but you know that

So....the bridge thing....I know it is taking its time because honestly I

a) Want to write the other characters and show the war.
Though it can't last forever, I admit a bunch of stall mode on to hear back from Kham and or FF, and it has been a couple of weeks now. I hope if Kham can't come back soon, he won't mind me writing Rothan....

Anyway, the primary goal is to keep it entertaining and so that is foremost in my mind.

Welcome to my world ^^

This is exactly what happened with the bunker arc, the hospital arc......... there is so much and it seems so little at the beginning.... then the further in you get, the more you realise.......

It's never gonna stop! there's more to write because you have to do it justice! Or synch your timing's with others.....

To which I say, don't stop writing what you want. If you cut bits because your getting impatient to get to tmore good stuff later you'll be cutting good bits now.

And the bridge scene is reaaaaaaally good. Almost makes me wish a group of Asari commando's could drop down in an escape pod and join in

Anyhow. There's been so little combat over the past month in Bastion this is the time to find ut just how many ways you can write a fight scene. I'm down to my last 10. Shooting a Maurader in the back of his throat with an explosive arrow and watching while his body fell into a Reaper flesh vat was number 11.

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

I know what you mean. We're in a stairwell. A f***ing stairwell. It's f***ing boring. I'm having a little bit of writer's block with it right now. Okay I've got an idea. .... Oh man, forgive me for this ass pull. It is a doozy. I'm going to create a service elevator. We'll open the citadel, jack a reaper transport and head back. Where do you want us to land?

[Kel Riever]

I think you got yourself up to that Citadel too quickly, and way ahead of everyone else. I don't know if you wanted to pick up the pace of things, or just wanted to put an installment in regarding the demise of my least favorite glowing faux child, but now that you are there, you don't have to make it an ass pull. There's a lot that could be done up at the Citadel, like finding Bailey, rescuing other survivors, all those people who are up there who we don't find out about. Surely, a bunch die. But a bunch can be saved. How did it happen? Was there an asari commando team involved? Save Barla Von! (that last one was a joke...you do NOT need to do that!)

Anyway, it would be nice having you back on the planet. But yes, that is a bit of a pull.....unless you can get super creative. Why did you do it, SJ? WHY DID YOU LEAVE US!

[Redbelle]

Bring me the character of Kelly Chambers....... (Meant to be said in the way that "Bring me the head of Alfredo Garcia" is said but.....meh).

I think what Rassasa needs is a nemesis. Somethng to occupy her in a well played game of combat that has all the hallmarks of a chess game. Like that Asari who tricked Shepard into helping her in LotSB.

Zia's storyline heavily involves Aria so she has to live. Zia needs to have a confrontation with her regarding what she's been doing pushing Wyld into her life, what she wanted with the sisters, why she allowed them to fight which resulted in Disdains death.

I think it may be time to create a Nemesis for Rasasa up on the Citadel.

Why not another Salarian? She's got history with those guys.

[Redbelle]

Kel Riever wrote...

I think you got yourself up to that Citadel too quickly, and way ahead of everyone else. I don't know if you wanted to pick up the pace of things, or just wanted to put an installment in regarding the demise of my least favorite glowing faux child, but now that you are there, you don't have to make it an ass pull. There's a lot that could be done up at the Citadel, like finding Bailey, rescuing other survivors, all those people who are up there who we don't find out about. Surely, a bunch die. But a bunch can be saved. How did it happen? Was there an asari commando team involved? Save Barla Von! (that last one was a joke...you do NOT need to do that!)

Anyway, it would be nice having you back on the planet. But yes, that is a bit of a pull.....unless you can get super creative. Why did you do it, SJ? WHY DID YOU LEAVE US!

All I'll say is that if the Reaper's were still co-ordinated, we would not have an alter of liquified human remains that the Reaper forces were paying tribute too......

The Reaper's kind of go bat**** crazy without a unified voice. Kinda like becoming factions.........

And Skar's revelation that Reapers can talk if they want to? Finally makes the Reapers more than a faceless bunch of walking targets that shoot back............

OMG! What if the nemesis wasthe half brother of Marauder Shields?  Or what if a Mauraduer appeared who was the Turian spectre that Saren killed on Eden Prime?

[Redbelle]

Or how about Rassa somehow boards and captains the Destiny Ascension?

[Kel Riever]

By the way, I am trying, within making sense, to get stuff done. There's a lot of characters I want to wrap, like I had mentioned. Its just...there's only so many hours I can burn a day doing this! RB and SJ, you know how I feel.

[Redbelle]

One day at a time Kel.......

One day at time.......

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

Okay okay. I've got it. It's in the room at the end, and yes it's an ass pull, but it's The Citadel.

[sH0tgUn jUliA]

Don't worry, even with the Crucible on its way, it will take a long time to get to Earth from Pluto. With all the debris in the system, you can't use FTL. So to get to Pluto to Earth will take at the speed of light 5.4 hours. That's at 8.3 minutes per astronomical unit. 1 AU = 93 million miles. So plenty of time people, don't worry.

Now that that piece of crap writing, and it is terrible, is out of the way, maybe I can get back on with things and find Bailey or someone else... like Ranassa's nemesis... perhaps oh noes! does Jona Sederis have someone new? Is 'Nassa jealous? Tune in again next time for another episode of bad fiction.

But I could still hop on one of those transports. It's not too late.... votes?

Modifié par sH0tgUn jUliA, 11 décembre 2013 - 12:41 .

[favoritehookeronthecitadel]

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Modifié par favoritehookeronthecitadel, 11 décembre 2013 - 03:53 .

[Kel Riever]

The new Naomi...only missing blonde hair color

[Redbelle]

Zia's crazy..... giving up Naomi for Wyld. Wyld's all hard composite armour and Naomi's........soooooo sooooooft <drool>

[Redbelle]

Mind you, Naomi's insane now..... and Wyld's squaring off against Reapers with nothing more than her history with a crazy drug fuelled biotic.

Lucy meanwhile is shoplifting with the best of intentions. That red coat though...... Naomi's set for another wardrobe upgrade.

Naomi's character may never be the same again after this.......