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I started this thread so that you could give me opinions on the book I'm writing... Originally it was a homework, but then it became something bigger, something with a real story and that inspired me each day that passed... So here I am now... 

Synopsis: Tangren is a smuggler, accompanied only by his protocol Droid, BD-37, on his travels. One day, they travel in search of a merchandise... But that merchandise would change their lives forever...

                                                                                            THE SMUGGLER

  Prologue

Once, upon a time there was a smuggler named Tangren. A lone man, black bearded, on his early 30’s, only accompanied on his journeys by his protocol droid: BD-37, a silver droid that was loyal to Tangren. BD had
red eyes, cylindrical head and it was tall.

One day, Tangren was exploring the galaxy, with his ship, the EBO-2358, when suddenly appeared one large ship, a MM-32 Cruiser.

― Sir, there is someone, or something, boarding the ship now. What should we do? Spoke BD-37 as the alarm sounded.

― Well, let’s see who is trying to pick up a fight, huh?

Tangren accessed the ship’s system cameras and saw one nasty creature, 4 red eyes, 2 heads and 1 big mouth.

― YOU’VE GOT TO BE KIDDING ME! Shouted Tangren

―Sir, what’s the problem?

― Hum? Oh yes. Let’s do this: you hide and I take care of him. Said Tangren pointing to the Droid Storage Room and to BD-37.

But BD replied:

― But Sir, I want to come along.

― No, I have to do this alone, I’m sorry.

Tangren said putting his hand on BD’s shoulder and then went to the cargo hold, where the monster was. He picked up his 2 blasters and went to battle.

Arriving there, he didn’t saw the creature, but knew it was present.

― Where are you? Tangren asked.

The creature jumped on him and then incapacitated him, taking him to the ship


The MM-32 Cruiser

 

Arriving there, the monster put him on the Holding Cells, where there was no escape. He then discovered that the monsters were cannibals and were planning to exterminate various alien species. While he still was dizzy, the monsters released him. When it was preparing to eat Tangren, a shot was heard and the monster collapsed.

For Tangren’s surprise, it was BD-37 with a Heavy Rifle fully loaded.

― Wait, BD?

― Master! There you are, it’s a pleasure to see you intact.

― What are you doing here? And, what is this rifle?

― Oh, just a little project that I made for situations like this.

― What, are you an assassin droid? Hahaha. Said Tangren while laughing.

― Yes, yes I am.

― WHAT? What in space is going on? What did these monsters did to my head? Damnit. I can’t believe it… Let me guess you’re some type of guardian, correct?

― Well, I installed this program on my data core, but I was built by you, don’t you remember?

― Oh, sorry, it’s… I’m feeling dizzy now, could we return to our ship? Said Tangren while reloading his pistols.

― Let’s go. Said both of them.

They were running, but then a blaster shot was heard, but in the nick of time, Tangren dodged the blaster shot.

Both looked back, when they saw what was it, it was the Captain, clearly recognized by his Medals and Armor.

They shot one time, but the Captain dodged, the Captain shot again, and then disarmed Tangren. But Tangren had a surprise: Grenades.

― Could you distract him for a moment BD? Whispered Tangren while setting a timer for the grenades.

BD then ran into the captain with his sword, while again, Tangren was surprised:

― Another project BD?

 BD replied “yes” while fighting the Captain.

Tangren put 2 minutes, what was enough for him to leave the ship. He put the grenades on the wires and the powers capacitors and then gave the signal to BD.

― Come on, we have 2 minutes. Shouted Tangren

―βϠϨẰẁ said the
Captain, on his unrecognized alien language.

BD and Tangren ran, and then they could get to the shuttle just in time. When Tangren was returning to his ship: BOOM! [/b]

The ship blew up and then both celebrated their victory, but it was just the beginning of a long journey.


Searching for a merchandise

― Sir, what are we going to do now?

― Well, let’s search for a merchandise, OK? See what you can find on secured or unsecured channels.

― OK sir. Will do sir.

―Oh, and, BD, stop calling me sir. You don’t need it.

― Well, it is in my programming to call you sir, besides it was you who constructed me. No?

― Well, it is also in your programming to obey me, so…

Tangren was interrupted when the console beeped: BIP, BIP,BIP[/b][/b]

― Wow, that was quick. Open The Communications Channel BD.

―Hello, are you Tangren, the infamous Smuggler?

“Infamous”? Tangren said to himself

― Yes. Yes I am. Why are you asking? Want a merchandise delivered to someone?

― Yes. I do. The Merchandise… Let’s call “Cargo” that I want it delivered is in Devales inside the jungle, you will find a tree, the only tree, there you will find it, inside there is all the information that you need to know.

― OK. BD, set a course to Devales. Spoke Tangren while shutting down the Communications Channel.

Arriving in the planet, Tangren felt that something was wrong, but he landed his ship in the Planet.

When he was arriving in the jungle, he accidentally activated a mine, but it was luck that it was only a stunning mine.

―Someone is still here. Said Tangren pointing to the mine.

Later, after 30 minutes of trip they finally arrived at their destination and they found the box, but it was already opened.

― Master, who do you think that opened this box? Said BD-37 looking to one side and the other, confused.

― Well, I don’t know. This place is supposed to be uninhabited.

Then it was seen the shadow of a black robed man running through the jungle with a sword and one pistol.

Then what it was seen after that, was only a giant cloud of poison gas and ion grenades, and then the duo was incapacitated.

The Black Robed Man and the Luds

The duo awakened chained in a small house with a lot of antique weapons, falling through the cracks, and in the only room that it had the house, Tangren spotted the Black Robed Man hammering and shooting at something.

―BD? Are you all right? Asked Tangren

― Well, apart from the quantity of the old weapons, being chained and that crazy black robed witch, yes Master, I’m fine.

― Don’t be so pessimist BD… don’t you remember what happened in that situation, when we were chained too, and a cannibal…

― Wait, I’m a droid. Interrupted BD-37.

―Hey, let me finish my story. So, where was I? Oh yes, and a cannibal AND a droid seller were looking at us and then we found a way out, blasting our way through. Well, it was only me. Back in the day I didn’t even knew that you were an assassin droid. Hahaha. Said Tangren while he was laughing.

― Yes, I remember Master.

―HEY. Both of you. Shouted the Black Robed Man while coming in the direction of the duo.

― What were you doing on the forest old man? Asked Tangren.

― Well, I was hunting, to survive. You know that this planet is uninhabited and I have to find a way to survive.

― And why did you chained us? Asked BD-37.

―Oh, I’m sorry. Said The Old Man while unchaining both of them. I only did this for my protection. The forest can drive you insane. There are many creatures in there, but tell me: What are you doing here?

―Well, we landed here on our ship to search for some merchandise.

― Are you smugglers? Outlanders and smugglers… Huh, I never thought that I would be seeing someone like you.

―And who are you Old Man?

― Please don’t call me that. I’m not too old, you know? I still can do a trick or two. My name is John. And you are…?

― I’m Tangren and he is my protocol droid BD-37.

 

 Meanwhile, on some place in the galaxy, the Luds, the nasty creatures that had 4 red eyes, 2 heads and 1 big mouth, reunited on their commander’s ship and were preparing for an invasion.



―OK my friends, we all know what we are going to do today. Said The Commander. We will conquer that planet , because of its riches resources, wood, food, gold! What our planet had before the war. The Lud’s War.

― For you, the new recruits that don’t know about The Lud’s War let me tell you how it was: the beginning to the end. Said the History Teller.

― The Lud’s War started 4000 years ago when the Dominus, the creatures of the planet DD-35, started to invade our worlds, conquering, slaughtering, SLAVING our people. The government didn’t want to do anything, stating that it was only Pirate raids. BUT TIME AFTER TIME, the people of Coruschytt, our home world, saw the lies, the fear of the government after the Belsavians started to conquer more systems, more planets, more cities. And then before the siege of Coruschytt began, WE, THE LUDS started to abandon the planet, but the government stayed on the planet, suffering for its actions, to abandon its people on times of need. And Finally began: The Siege of Coruschytt. The enemy’s showed no mercy, they bombed our world with nuclear weapons, WEAPONS of Mass Destruction. And then Coruschytt was no more. And that is why we live on our ships now without government, just one Commander.

The story of The Lud’s War ended, leaving the recruits shocked

―Scout Leader, did your patrols on Devales returned your transmissions? Asked the Commander

― Not yet Sir, but I believe I will get responses in the end of the day.

― I hope so Scout Leader… for your own sake.

Modifié par MegaIllusiveMan, 08 septembre 2013 - 01:58 .


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Oh, also forgot to add... Leave comments(good or bad)... They are welcome...

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Editted again... This thing looked like a poem!

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Very cool. Double check your grammar. Keep writing, you seem to have a knack for it...
:)

Modifié par mybudgee, 08 septembre 2013 - 04:36 .


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mybudgee wrote...

Very cool. Double check your grammar. Keep writing, you seem to have a knack for it...
:)


Ohh. Thanks. Gonna check it out later... I'm from Brazil, so I can't write all of this. But I'm gonna check it out.

Also, gonna update it again.

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Updated! And fixed formatting.