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[100k]

WHAT IS THIS?

 

Its my ME3 rewrite. Well, the 50% or so which is completed. While it needs editing and organization still, I figured I might as well dump what I have. This story fully incorporates the choices made throughout ME1 and ME2 (even minor choices) and weaves them into ME3's storyline in what I hope is a believable story. The story was easy to conceive because it was based entirely on foreshadowing presented in ME1 and ME2, and pre-official ME3 media (DLC, books, comics, movies, etc). As such there are many characters, events, and scenarios that happen in this game that are not part of the official game. I honestly did not use my imagination for anything other than embellishing these foreshadowings. An example of this could be the importance of Klencory, and the 'beings of light' seen by Kumun Shol, a concept first presented in ME1. This tiny world building element plays a big part in my rewrite of ME3, because it was foreshadowed to so. These foreshadowings ultimately bring my story of ME3 to what I hope is a satisfying conclusion for the series, no matter the choices Shepard made along the way. 

 

WHAT THIS IS NOT

 

This is not the official ME3 game with a different ending. This is a very different story from the official game, albeit with similar elements to it. I think you'll find, however, that the story and its elements are very 'appropriate' --  all you have to do is look at ME1 and ME2, and think about how certain plot threads were originally designed. There are many similarities between my rewrite and the official game however. These are because many events were foreshadowed in earlier ME content. Shepard battling against Oleg at Omega or using an ancient device to stop the reapers is not me copying the official game's story, it is me taking up elements of earlier established plots and running with them. In these cases Bioware and I came to the same conclusions. 

 

This is not a stand against the official game or its developers/producers. Bioware is full people who are clearly passionate about their games. For now I will keep my personal thoughts on the official ME3 private. This is merely my head canon, based on (you guessed it) the foreshadowing from previous games.

 

This is not the ending that "'your characters deserve'". This is the story that was foreshadowed for them. Whether they live or die; are major characters or insignificant; this is what I believed their roles were going to lead to. 

 

This is not a hopeful plea for recognition from Bioware, EA, or any other developer to remake Mass Effect 3. I am fully aware that, to many of you, this is an utter waste of time not worth any attention. For those of you who think so, please treat my rewrite and thread as such. 

 

This project is not finished or particularly well organized. My apologies for both of these things. I will be working on organization as I go along. 

 

WHY BOTHER?

 

• It is taking up too much room in my head, and has been for years. The ideas, the plots, the characters, the roles, etc are all consuming too much of my brain power. Writing it out helps me. If I'm willing to write it out, I might as well share it with passionate fans as well.
• I've been working on this for a long time. Two years to be exact. I want to finish this, not just give up.
• Because its fun for me. Tiring, but fun.
• Because I hope at least one of you will appreciate this.

That's it. I am not here to bash Bioware, or their fans. I am not here to bash the official game, or other fan rewrites, or anything else. I am expressing my head canon. If you hate the idea of a rewrite, then this thread won't help you. 

 

WHEN DID THIS MADNESS START?

 

2012. I started this a month or so after the release of the official game. I planned on finishing that summer, and got pretty far into it. However my schedule with college, work, and socializing stemmed my devotion for a while. It was only earlier this year that I really picked this project back up. 

 

WHAT DOES MY REWRITE CONSIST OF?

 

• A Foreword -- which will only be made public when it is completed. It will essentially detail everything written above in this forum post.
• An overview -- which is almost set in stone. There are a few elements that will be altered (the importance of the Collector base will be edited, and Prothean Javik will be removed completely, among a few other things). I will be linking you characters, story elements, etc with it.
• Character bios -- most of which are done. I will of course be taking requests for any and all characters (major or minor) that you want me to work on next, and I greatly appreciate if people would let me know about inconsistencies in logic, foreshadowing, plot relativism, etc so I can fix them right away. Also for some characters, their bios are notably shorter than others. This is because the foreshadowing presented in ME1 and ME2 was very limited (think Grunt, Jacob, Jack) in comparison to those who's foreshadowed importance was very strong (think Kasumi, Wrex, Legion, etc). I would love if you would openly or privately discuss what you think their role should be in my rewrite. I can write basic bios for the sparsely described characters, but I could always use opinions.
• Plot device descriptions -- of which there are only a handful in total. Right now I think there are only two written.
• Missions. Simple enough. Many missions, however, are contained in character bios (remnants of my earliest drafts of the rewrite). I will be editing these.
• Story element descriptions. These are found in notes I make throughout bios and descriptions detailing the importance of certain aspects of the story, particularly those which, at first sight, appear to be a jump in logic.
• Game play changes -- of which almost nothing has been written.

 

Please note that, despite the fact that many characters and events have different roles from that of the official game, I have still kept their official names/titles. I have done this so that my readers (and myself I suppose) have an easier time keeping track of the story's happenings. Things like the Leviathan of Dis, the Crucible, James Vega, etc may all be distinct in my rewrite, but I saw no reason good enough to change their names if it just confused people.

 

I hope you all enjoy this project of mine. It has a long way to completion, but I think that this universe and its content are worth the struggle. Thank you to everyone who reads my content. Please feel free to ask me any questions, give me suggestions, or discuss the meat and potatoes of this rewrite. 

 

Story outline

 

Character bios

 

Zaeed

 

Miranda

 

Wrex

 

Kaidan

 

Mordin

 

Gianna Parasini 

 

Garrus

 

Thane

 

Jack

 

Morinth

 

Tali

 

James Vega

 

Samara

 

Ash

 

Liara

 

Legion

 

Kasumi

 

Randall Ezno

 

Talon Visk

 

Kai Leng

 

Grunt

 

Shepard

 

A few more are needed. TIM, Anderson, Aria, Jacob, Shiala, and a few others will be added. I can also take requests.

 

Story missions, slightly ordered.

 

Tutorial Paragon ME2

 

Tutorial Renegade ME2

 

Citadel intro

 

Klencory

 

Crucible - description 

 

Shadow Base intro

 

War summit I

 

Rachni Queen

 

...

 

Part of the geth/quarian arch

 

Geth Sphere - description

 

Geth Sphere intro mission "A House United"

 

Geth Sphere second main mission "The Virus" (Harbinger intro)

 

...

 

Finale of Shadow Broker versus Cerberus network

 

Fall of Cerberus - Cronos Station

 

 

 

[100k]

Bump?

[Drone223]

You do know that there no proper build up for the "dark energy plot" right? It was only mentioned three times in ME2 and two of them were optional missions, and when they were mentioned it was never tied with the main plot.

[Argentoid]

I found and read your posts back in 2012. Don't ask me how. But they were mostly well written, at least the character bios. I'll give it a new read so I can provide some criticism.

[mousestalker]

OP, you may want to repost your ME related fan fic here as this is the area for DA related fanfic. I suspect more and more appreciative readers will see your work in the appropriate area.

[100k]

You do know that there no proper build up for the "dark energy plot" right? It was only mentioned three times in ME2 and two of them were optional missions, and when they were mentioned it was never tied with the main plot.

Yes and no. On the one hand the content was, as you said, optional. But then again so was stuff like planet information which revealed things like the Leviathan of Dis, or the structures on Ploba. 

 

On the other hand questions were raised in ME2, particularly with the Quarians relationship to dark energy and Haelstrom. This is both me answering the question, and giving the Crucible, Reapers, etc more validity than simple explanations. I really do think the dark energy plot, or at least plot threads, would have played out this way. This was long before I knew about Drew's original plans for dark energy either.

[100k]

I found and read your posts back in 2012. Don't ask me how. 

lol, I can guess where Thanks.

[Drone223]

Yes and no. On the one hand the content was, as you said, optional. But then again so was stuff like planet information which revealed things like the Leviathan of Dis, or the structures on Ploba.

On the other hand questions were raised in ME2, particularly with the Quarians relationship to dark energy and Haelstrom. This is both me answering the question, and giving the Crucible, Reapers, etc more validity than simple explanations. I really do think the dark energy plot, or at least plot threads, would have played out this way. This was long before I knew about Drew's original plans for dark energy either.

Well the lack of build up is one of the many problems with the dark energy plot and Drew didn't made an effort to try and make it relevant to over all plot, there is also the issue of "human genetic diversity being the key to solving the dark energy problem." that just makes no sence.

Humans are in fact have a low amount of genetic diversity, due to have very low breeding peers at one point in our history (can't remember how long ago). Then there is the fact it comes down to letting the reapers resume the harvest in order to stop the spread of dark energy or destroying the reapers and domming the universe, and why build the mass relays's (which produce even more dark energy) when your goal is to stop it spreading. I can give you a list of the issues with the dark energy plot, but If your going to write about it you should know what's wrong with the original plot itself.

[100k]

Well the lack of build up is one of the many problems with the dark energy plot and Drew didn't made an effort to try and make it relevant to over all plot, there is also the issue of "human genetic diversity being the key to solving the dark energy problem." that just makes no sence.

Humans are in fact have a low amount of genetic diversity, due to have very low breeding peers at one point in our history (can't remember how long ago). Then there is the fact it comes down to letting the reapers resume the harvest in order to stop the spread of dark energy or destroying the reapers and domming the universe, and why build the mass relays's (which produce even more dark energy) when your goal is to stop it spreading. I can give you a list of the issues with the dark energy plot, but If your going to write about it you should know what's wrong with the original plot itself.

I am fully aware of what Drew's plans were for the series. Keep in mind when I started writing this Drew hadn't released his details about where the series would have gone, so I was going with what I thought was the most logical path for dark energy.

 

You're correct though, in Drew's version of ME2/ME3 the reapers were the guys doing a necessary evil to stop dark energy build ups. In my version the reapers are completely dependent on dark energy technology (their entire existence is based off of it), and the build up of dark energy in other parts of the galaxy is because the reapers are planning on building more mass relays after the harvest (for example, they used the geth/collectors to bombard the sun of Haestrom with dark energy in order to create a future mass relay's core).

[Drone223]

I am fully aware of what Drew's plans were for the series. Keep in mind when I started writing this Drew hadn't released his details about where the series would have gone, so I was going with what I thought was the most logical path for dark energy.

 

You're correct though, in Drew's version of ME2/ME3 the reapers were the guys doing a necessary evil to stop dark energy build ups. In my version the reapers are completely dependent on dark energy technology (their entire existence is based off of it), and the build up of dark energy in other parts of the galaxy is because the reapers are planning on building more mass relays after the harvest (for example, they used the geth/collectors to bombard the sun of Haestrom with dark energy in order to create a future mass relay's core).

Thanks for clarifying, your version of DE sounds better than the concept version and it is believable.

[100k]

Thanks. Please ask more questions or make more suggestions. 

[100k]

New entry: Asari diplomat. 

[100k]

Some general changes made to game play and structure.

[luna1124]

Yep, you are in the wrong forum This is Dragon Age not ME3 LOL

[themikefest]

Will you include Samantha Traynor? If so, are you going to keep the same content as we see in ME3 or add some content for her?

 

As others have said, you're in the wrong forum.

[100k]

Yes, Traynor will be in my rewrite -- mostly because there needs to be characters in case  everyone was killed off in ME2. She has the role of Yeoman, and Kelly has the role of psychologist.

 

I was moved here, and not by choice. I'd love to move it back but am afraid I'd get banned.

[100k]

Here's what I've been working on this weekend. Yay summer.

 

Kar'Shan Destroyed

 

Leviathan of Dis

 

Hunt a Killer

 

Leng's Revenge

[100k]

Gonna continue posting here because this is where i was originally directed, and because this fan fiction section isn't a graveyard like the other section

[100k]

I really updated the outline. This is as near to perfect as the narrative can get. 

 

1. Invasion Tutorial (Vega, Jacob recruited, VS recruited, Joker intro)

2. Citadel

• Al Jilani/Allers recruited

• Traynor, Cortez, Adams, Daniels, Holloway, Chambers, Michel, Chakwas recruited

3. Klencory (Leng, Liara introduced)

4. Shadow Base hub (Shiala, EDI, Miranda recruited, end of Cerberus alliance)

5. Palaven: Extract Reaper specialist (Garrus recruited)

• 1^st War Summit – Crucible, Palaven discussion

• Tuchanka intro (Wrex/Wreav, Bakara intro)

• Talon recruited on Citadel

6. Sur Kesh hub

• Mordin/Wicks recruited

• 2^nd War Summit – Genophage discussion

7. Tuchanka hub

• Krogan Hollows (Grunt recruited, character arc)

• Reaper fight

• Fate of Genophage (Wrex, Mordin character arc)

• 3^rd War Summit – Terminus Systems

• Asari Diplomat (Randall recruited)

8. Omega

• Infiltrate Omega

• Archangel Returns (Garrus character arc)

• Project Aegis (Randall arc)

• Assault on Afterlife

• Power Vaccuum (Aria character arc)

• 4^th War Summit – Geth-Quarian conflict discussion

9. War and Peace – Admiralty Board, Tali/Kal, Legion/Union (if available)

• Rannoch: Reclaimed (Tali character arc)

• Birth of Dyson Sphere, hub

• The Virus (Overlord data available, Legion character arc)

• 5^th War Summit – Assault on Palaven discussion

10. Fight for Palaven

• 6^th War Summit – Asari assistance discussion

• Thessia hub: Forum of Matriarchs (Samara/Morinth character arc, Liara character arc)

• Destruction of Kar'Shan

• 7^th War Summit – Batarian assistance, Leviathan of Dis discussions

• Interrogate Balak, Talon

11. Leviathan of Dis

• Testing the Crucible (Leviathan plot arc)

• 8^th War Summit – Effectiveness of Crucible discussion

12. Shore leave disrupted

• Stop a Killer

• Hunt a Killer

• Leng's Wrath

• Secret Summit I – Intro to Shadow War campaign

• Thane's death + funeral

13. The Shadow War

• Omega – Spear Base (Jacob arc)

• Omega – Project Aegis (if not already completed)

• The Barn (Miranda arc)

• Secret Summit II – Cronos Station discussion

• Miranda-Jack conflict (possible death of Miranda/Jack)

14. The Fall of Cerberus: Cronos Station (Jack arc)

15. Citadel Council Inquiry (possible TIM arc)

16. The Trial (Shepard's character arc)

• Climax of Romance subplots

• Finishing sidequests

• 9^th War Summit – Summary of allied strength, tactics, etc

• EDI arc

• Vega arc

• Shiala arc

• rest of supporting cast arc

17. Assault on Earth

18. Aftermath

• Memorium

• Celebration (Allers/Al Jilani, Talon arc, Shepard possibly imprisonned)

19. Secret Ending(s)

• Batarian Prison Ending (5 years later)

• Collector Base Ending (possible TIM, Petrovsky arc)

• Harbinger's Tale

 

Notable side missions:

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(collect Crucible VI missions)

• Klencory: Vehmence (necessary)

• Mars: Vendetta

• Thessia: Victory

• Kahje: Vocal

• Citadel Hidden Wards: Pashek Vran

• Illos: Vigil

  --------------------------

• Illium: Investigate Exogeni Corp (possible romance for Gianna Parasini)

• Rannoch: Secure Settlements (Kal character arc)

• Rachni Queen/merc band extraction

• Sur Kesh: STG alliance (recruit Kirahee if alive)

• Enter the Greybox (Kasumi character arc, some Batarians recruited)

• Overthrow Blue Suns (Zaeed character arc, Suns recruited)

• Luna: Close to Home (VS character arc)

• Citadel: Spectre Status Garrus/Jacob

• Investigate Cerberus' explosives

• Citadel Hospital: Visit Inali

   

   

[Felps Cross]

This is a really good writing. Nicely done man.

 

More people should look into this forum more often, it has a lot of dedication and hardwork in the posts, as we can see.

[100k]

Thank you. Its tough and time consuming but rewarding. Just added two more sections.

 

Shepard's trial "Facing the Music"

 

Leviathan's story arc "Testing the Crucible"

[Alekthefirst]

I wish you'd written the main story arc for ME3

[ptjz2015]

Really enjoying this right now. Keep up the good work.