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[Tess]

*sips coffee*

 

Alrighty.....time to pick up where we left off getting Lavellan laid.

 

*sits down in writing corner of Blanket Fort*

I am at the moment going through revisions of my earlier chapters. Finally someone had the guts to point out what they felt was out of place and I agree - I had that feeling for some time but noone actually mentioned it, so I shrugged it off as just being dissatisfied with own work. So besides correcting that, I am checking the previous chapters for mistakes and stuff.

 

Please, if anyone has any commentary regarding my fic (given you read it, otherwise just skip this mumble of mine), tell me now, message it if you need, throw it on my FB or I don't know. I can't see some mistakes. Outside pair of eyes is always good.

 

And to stay OT

[FernRain]

The only voice that has irritated me was Jowan. Maker his whining voice was the worst.

[Cee]

*sips coffee*

 

Alrighty.....time to pick up where we left off getting Lavellan laid.

 

*sits down in writing corner of Blanket Fort*

 

Now that I've decided to roll with this, I feel like writing this sex is going to take a ton of tweaking and editing to both reflect the tone I want it to have (more about intimacy and feelings than smutty details or anything) as well as not sound ridiculous.  I think I know how to end and transition it to the next part, but this one part will probably need attention for some time.

[MayriyaNoori]

Now that I've decided to roll with this, I feel like writing this sex is going to take a ton of tweaking and editing to both reflect the tone I want it to have (more about intimacy and feelings than smutty details or anything) as well as not sound ridiculous.  I think I know how to end and transition it to the next part, but this one part will probably need attention for some time.

Then we can both sit in the sex writing corner today and share all the nonsense that comes.

 

Because the struggle is real.

 

Not sure if that's the best way to put that.......mind is already in the gutter.

[drosophila]

*sips coffee*

 

Alrighty.....time to pick up where we left off getting Lavellan laid.

 

*sits down in writing corner of Blanket Fort*

 

 

Now that I've decided to roll with this, I feel like writing this sex is going to take a ton of tweaking and editing to both reflect the tone I want it to have (more about intimacy and feelings than smutty details or anything) as well as not sound ridiculous.  I think I know how to end and transition it to the next part, but this one part will probably need attention for some time.

 

*Sitting in sex writing corner*

 

Let me join the party As it happens, I got this smut idea this morning and my Lavellan is on the way to getting laid today too. Not 100% where exactly this will go yet.

 

Writing is 300% more fun in company, by the way. It's like we're sitting in that clubhouse in Cee's dream.

[Cee]

Then we can both sit in the sex writing corner today and share all the nonsense that comes.

 

Because the struggle is real.

 

Not sure if that's the best way to put that.......mind is already in the gutter.

 

For me, my issue in the immediate is attempting to write in reactions, audible and otherwise, for Nehn because feelings and imagination and internal sensations on Nirwen's part, I have. But she needs to give her girl some positive feedback in the moment too. I've done that a little by writing in movements and other things, but I may also be overthinking it.

[MayriyaNoori]

*Sitting in sex writing corner*

 

Let me join the party As it happens, I got this smut idea this morning and my Lavellan is on the way to getting laid today too. Not 100% where exactly this will go yet.

 

Writing is 300% more fun in company, by the way. It's like we're sitting in that clubhouse in Cee's dream.

Well, this is me atm in our corner.

 

[drosophila]

For me, my issue in the immediate is attempting to write in reactions, audible and otherwise, for Nehn because feelings and imagination and internal sensations on Nirwen's part, I have. But she needs to give her girl some positive feedback in the moment too. I've done that a little by writing in movements and other things, but I may also be overthinking it.

 

I like the mention of sighs, gasps, just sounds of any kind. I place importance on sound a lot. Also, small things that they say that reveal the dynamic and give feedback to the POV character. 

 

I don't know if we should take this smut writing talk to the writing group to avoid getting banned 

[MayriyaNoori]

For me, my issue in the immediate is attempting to write in reactions, audible and otherwise, for Nehn because feelings and imagination and internal sensations on Nirwen's part, I have. But she needs to give her girl some positive feedback in the moment too. I've done that a little by writing in movements and other things, but I may also be overthinking it.

I know that feel.

 

It sounds like trying to find that fine line between writing a good scene that has emotions, character development.....and they're doing it and so you don't want it to sound like a porno.

 

Or a dramatic reading of Rough and Ready.

[Cee]

I like the mention of sighs, gasps, just sounds of any kind. I place importance on sound a lot. Also, small things that they say that reveal the dynamic and give feedback to the POV character. 

 

I don't know if we should take this smut writing talk to the writing group to avoid getting banned 

 

We could do that, create a smut corner.

 

And I've been including those and laughs and gestures and such, but it's more or less a measure at this point. I have a certain point I intend to reach and it's not even a long part since there's also plot to get to.....eventually.

[MayriyaNoori]

I started a discussion.

 

It's just titled smut.

[drosophila]

Oops,  'd now there are two smut corners. Sorry. Moving over to Mayriya's. 

[Cee]

I think Fly'Harel's title is more descriptive and appropriate for a writing corner.

[Uirebhiril]

I like the mention of sighs, gasps, just sounds of any kind. I place importance on sound a lot. Also, small things that they say that reveal the dynamic and give feedback to the POV character. 

 

This is making me twitchy because of reading one too many stories where the woman ends up with almost entirely the same response to what is being done to her. Some mixture of whines, mewls, whimpers, stutters her lover's name, begs, or in one way or the other acts like a passive partner to the party. Using any of these in a story is fine, certainly, and especially so if that's truly the nature of the character. But every character in almost every story doing it and using more than one of the above gets to be a bit much for me. I suppose part of the fault is mine for reading a chunk of stories at a time that are the same genre, but it would be nice if people switched it up a bit by using different words or rephrasing things. Makes it less boring. And I love stories where both partners are involved and invested, and the actions are equal and neither side is passive.

 

That moment when Hawke and Fenris kiss, and Hawke pushes him against the wall and you can just see a full-body experience going on for both sides? Basically that.

 

...Gosh is it time for coffee already I'll just be heading off now...

[Ellawynn]

*Sigh* You know, I really wish I could get tired at, like, eleven at night, instead of four in the morning. One on hand, it's so nice to go sleep when I'm dead tired - I actually sleep, just all through out the night, instead of the intermittent napping my sleep usually consists of. On the other hand... you wake up at noon and already lost half the day. And getting up tomorrow at seven's gonna be awful...

 

Anyway, uh, hi.

 

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Kinda have to disagree. Lavellan's appeared vulnerable multiple times throughout the fic. Especially in the latest chapter (12). 

 

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She's definitely gotten better about it, yeah. But when she opens up, it's with spirits, or Haninan, when you'd think her strongest relationship should be with Pride. But because she isn't that... emotional, I suppose, with him... it just feels lacking. Combine it with the fact that he is that emotional with her, that she has so much influence and sway over him, how she sort of condescends and infantilizes him, that she displays none of this vulnerability and malleability herself in the relationship... 

 

Maybe it's because I just didn't play my Solasmance like that. And hopefully the revelation of the truth will help clear some of this up.

 

And regardless, she doesn't treat Solas with the same respect as Lavellan. Which is another thing she's gotten better about - It was, as I said, one of the biggest issues for me in Dread Wolf's Heart. But... I feel like respect for canon is a big part of writing good fanfic. And I feel like it's something a lot of people overlook because it's a problem that doesn't really show up with original fiction, and because sometimes people don't want to respect canon if they don't like where it's going. Hopefully, Feynite got it all out of her system with DWH... but I am ever the pessimist...

 

Looking Glass reactions

 

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This is the way I see it. Characters' reactions to events and relationships cannot always be rational. If you can put yourself into Lavellan's shoes and put your logical brain aside you may be able to understand better why the author wrote the relationships the way she wrote it. On the other hand, as good of a writer Feynite is, she's still new at this and she doesn't seem to have an editor or a beta so some things are going to escape her notice. I think she has already done a good job of not allowing her personal fantasies to overly color the work.

 

Some writers overly describe their Lavellans or give them such an extreme personality that makes their Lavellans hard to relate to. Feynite does not even give her Lavellan a first name. However, we are all limited by our life experiences and perspectives so personal biases are going to make their way into the work. Her descriptions of Solas as being young and inexperienced and of Lavellan being the wise one may be a reaction to our frustrations in the game of how smug, stubborn, and knowledgeable Solas is. I think a lot of players want to put Solas in his place, but were not able to do it in the game so it comes out in fanfiction. Maybe she overdid it and made the relationship too uneven, but it's still better than a lot of the other fanfics that I've read on the Solas Lavellan relationship. For example, some writers make Lavellan look like a teenager in love with an all-knowing God and some writers make the relationship way too angsty. I will take cute Solas over constantly brooding Solas everyday. Solas was sometimes gloomy in the game, but he wasn't like that allll the time.

 

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Oh God I hear you on how uncomfortable the teenage-Lavellan in love with All-knowing-God-Solas thing is. Hello, Apotheosis. I certainly don't want the fic to turn into that.

 

*Sigh* I suppose that's just it, then. I don't really have any desire to "put Solas in his place." Prove him wrong, yeah, but that can be done respectfully, with care for his own wisdom and experience. Hmm. 

 

...Eh, sorry for clogging up your thread with this debate, to all those who don't care to follow it.

[Garnet]

If you mean to say you are terrible for using references you're not.

 

Artist of the highest levels use references. It's not cheating. There are examples everywhere of famous paintings and works that were all done with references whether it was a picture or model. My mother is a painter and I have seen her use references in all her work.

 

Sorry if this was a mini rant/tangent thing. This is just one of those weird ticks with me. I mean, the way I see it art is an interpretation of reality through some medium.

 

I fail to see how one can interpret reality without a reference to it.

 

Whatever reference an artist needs, that's up to them.

 

K, rant over.

 

Morning thread!

I agree with this completely. Using references makes people better artists.

I meant to say I'm terrible for not using a reference. I just sort of winged it.

I don't think my Solas kiss wallpaper counts. I know the coloring would be way more accurate if I used an actual reference. 

[drosophila]

This is making me twitchy because of reading one too many stories where the woman ends up with almost entirely the same response to what is being done to her. Some mixture of whines, mewls, whimpers, stutters her lover's name, begs, or in one way or the other acts like a passive partner to the party. Using any of these in a story is fine, certainly, and especially so if that's truly the nature of the character. But every character in almost every story doing it and using more than one of the above gets to be a bit much for me. I suppose part of the fault is mine for reading a chunk of stories at a time that are the same genre, but it would be nice if people switched it up a bit by using different words or rephrasing things. Makes it less boring. And I love stories where both partners are involved and invested, and the actions are equal and neither side is passive.

 

That moment when Hawke and Fenris kiss, and Hawke pushes him against the wall and you can just see a full-body experience going on for both sides? Basically that.

 

...Gosh is it time for coffee already I'll just be heading off now...

 

Thanks! This is actually something great that I'll keep in mind to watch out for! But so far I'm really not worried about my Lavellan coming across as passive  

[Elessara]

I liked Adam Howden as Anders.  I didn't like it when I played DAA and realised they used Greg Ellis who had played a mage hating templar in DAO and then a templar hating mage in DAA.  It was like, really guys?

[S.W.]

The only voice that has irritated me was Jowan. Maker his whining voice was the worst.

 

Oh man, I was such a b*tch to Jowan on my first ever playthrough of DA:O purely because of his whiny voice. I sold him out to Irving because I couldn't stand this pathetic older apprentice who seemed to have trouble tying his shoelaces by himself.

 

Thing is, in retrospect, Jowan's actually an interesting character. Sympathetic, sweet, very young. wouldn't intentionally hurt anyone, owns up to his mistakes straight away (unlike others), and does every thing he can to amend them and not make the situation worse in the end. If you're kind enough to him, you can have him sent back to the Circle - which I didn't know first playthrough, I just told him to eff off straight away. Oh, it's you Jowan. Bored of playing blood mage yet? etc.

 

I actually feel for the kid, he's got no idea what he's doing, but he tries so hard and I have to appreciate that much.

[Janic99]

Hello guys.. what's up? I really need some distraction today... I could not have worse day than this.. anyone got something that would cheer me up a little?  n__n''

[NightSymphony]

Hello guys.. what's up? I really need some distraction today... I could not have worse day than this.. anyone got something that would cheer me up a little?  n__n''

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[Cerulione]

Hello... New elf here, finally make a Solavellan so I'm joining the bandwagon with a cup of tears for afternoon tea. Nice to meet you all  

[MayriyaNoori]

Omg, this has me in stitches!!!

 

source i think

 

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[Kadan]

Hello... New elf here, finally make a Solavellan so I'm joining the bandwagon with a cup of tears for afternoon tea. Nice to meet you all

Welcome to the Blanketfort where we do our best to keep each other sane while going through Solavellan hellspirals.

[Cerulione]

Welcome to the Blanketfort where we do our best to keep each other sane while going through Solavellan hellspirals.

 

 

Gosh, after the Trespasser DLC... Guess that I'm sold. Solavellan. It has to be Solavellan. Whew. This is going to be a teary ride >_<