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[Novel] Dragon Age: Dawn of the Gods - Chapter three is up! "Revelations" 1/29!


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Hello, all. Here's a fanfic proceeding the events of DA: O. I hope you enjoy it--and please, keep in mind while reading that I am in my youth, and may not exceed the same vocabulary as you adults out there. :)

Also, if you could leave a comment telling me what you liked/disliked, that' be great! :D


Chapter Selection:

Prologue

Taken In the Night


The Vision

Revelations



Prologue

Zovarice hunted his prey from the perch of one of the Karcari Wilds' many trees. His two targets were nearly below him, clad in the standard uniform of the Templar. Zovarice readied his two daggers, and prepared himself for a jump. When his prey was directly below him, he leapt, falling towards the ground. He successfully landed on the right of the two Templars, and ducked as the left swung wildly at him. Zovarice reered in behind the Templar, digging his left dagger into his throat, where the helmet failed to protect the flesh. There was a sickening gargle, and the Templar fell, dead.

The second had already picked himself up, and stood in a fighting stance, ready for a counter attack. Zovarice smirked, and lobbed his second dagger. It flew flawlessly, and landed itself in the visor of the Templar's full helmet. He, too, fell dead. Zovarice took a moment to gather his spent weapons.

Satisfied, and convinced that the two Templars were dead, Zovarice turned and ran to share the news with his mother.

* * * * *

"Ah, my dear child," a voice greeted Zovarice as he entered the hut he and his mother shared. His mother took her son's handsome face into her hands and cradeled it. "I trust the task is complete?"

"Yes, mother," Zovarice confirmed, kissing her on the cheek.

"Good." she replied warmingly. "I am proud of you, son. 'Twas not too hard of a task, I take it?"

Zovarice spat. "Hardly."

His mother smiled as she studdied him, carressing his face with her thumbs. He had long, jet black hair, a defined chin, and sky blue eyes. She could not help but notice how much he looked like his father. "There will be more."

Zovarice laughed, taking his mother's hands into his. "They dare to mess with the legendary Morrigan?" he challenged, speaking highly of his mother.

Morrigan shook her head. "If they are to come for me, 'twill not be I who stops them. I am not the mage I used to be."

"I will protect you, mother. Always."

"I know you will, my son." Morrigan soothed. "But I must rest."

"Of course, mother," Zovarice said, retracting from her grasp. "Do not let me disturb you. I will be outside, keeping watch should you need me."  He kissed his mother one last time, and exited the hut, stepping outside.

Eyes fell upon Zovarice from a distance. "So, this is where they're hiding." a voice purred. "Tomas, go gather the others. We'll attack at nightfall. Remember--we need her alive."

"Of course, Knight Commander Cullen. But what of the boy? Surely his mother has trained him in the arts of magic, too?" Tomas said.

"He's of no importance. Kill him, if it comes to it." Cullen retorted.

Tomas bowed, and went to gather the rest. Cullen studdied Zovarice a bit longer before he retreated back into the Wilds.

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Hey, this sounds quite interesting. I'll definitely be following this. I don't think I've seen another fanfic that deals with a grown-up Godchild.

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Thanks. I have quite the plot brewing! :P

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Chapter One: Taken In the Night

Warden Commander Jaiden Cousaland dug his blade into another Hurlock--the tall, commanding officers of the Darkspawn--, and batted a second away with his shield. He shied away from nearly a dozen more of the Darkspawn creatures, until his back met another Warden's--Gerard.

Gerard let out a coarse laugh, breathing heavily, tired from the battle.  "I--" he stopped, sucking in air. "I haven't had this much fun in awhile...!"

Jaiden chuckled, also running short on breath. "There's nearly thirty of them. Two of us."

A smile tugged at Gerard's lips. "Well, the odds hardly seem fair," he admitted truthfully. Then added: "For them."

Jaiden joined his pupil with a similar grin. "Steady," he said, studying his enemies. The Darkspawn slowly made their way forward, most of the Genlocks--the small peons of the Darkspawn--shying away. Even the Hurlocks were reluctant to advance. Finally, the first move was made, and a Hurlock charged Jaiden.

The Warden Commander reacted by deflecting the blow with his shield, and swung out with an efficent lunge toward his enemy's torso. It penetrated the armor, and the Hurlock fell, dead. Gerard and Jaiden both retracted from eachother, charging their enemies. Gerard tackled a pair of Genlocks, decapitating one and severely wounding the other.

One by one, two by two, the Wardens battled with undivided strength and percision, reducing the Darkspawn's army with every swing and blow. Soon, there was nothing left. The Wardens stood victorious.

"So..." Gerard began, polishing his blade of the poisonous blood. "Any idea as to why the Darkspawn are so far from the Deep Roads? Why would they be way out here, near Redcliffe?"

Jaiden gathered his breath before responding. "We've been running into small parties all over the area, but nothing too drastic. This has been the biggest yet. With King Bhelen pushing the Darkspawn back in the Deep Roads, some of the bastard have been crawling out of their holes." He stopped, running a hand through his hair. "At any rate, we should return to Redcliffe castle. Arl Teagan is awaiting us."

Gerard nodded. "Then let us waste no time." 

* * * * *

Zovarice watched his mother as she slept with concern.  She was nearly thirty-six years of age, and though age had caughten up to her a little, she remained as beautiful as ever. Though recently, her powers had been weakening. He could see the life within her fading, yet he knew not why. It certainly wasn't her age, for she was still young. Something within her was causing her life to fade away, and Zovarice could see it eating at her a day at a time.

He sighed, watching his mother lovingly, in case she needed his aid. There was a banging at the door. Zovarice immidiately withdrew from his seat, hands reaching for his belt insticntively. The door was kicked open, and he let a dagger fly. It hit its target without trouble, and a Templar on the other end yelled in pain as a blade tore through his armored chest. Several more Templars filled the small hut, and Zovarice pulled his other dagger, lashing wildly at the nearest. He missed, and two Templars tackled him, sending his weapon flying out of his hand.

Zovarice struggled, trying to break free from the Templar's grasp, but to no avail. One of the Templars forced him to his knees while another held a blade to his throat. Morrigan had awoken just in time to witness this.

"Mother!" Zovarice screamed in worry as a Templar reached for her. Without thinking, Zovarice muttered a spell, and the Templar erupted in flames, screaming and thrashing wildly as he fled outside.

"Hault!" a voice roared. Zovarice strained to see the speaker. I red headed man, tall, and stern stood with his arms folded. "So," he spoke. "This is the Morrigan of legend?"

"Bastard!" Morrigan responded, sitting upright in her bed. "Unhand my son, or I'll--"

"You'll what?" Cullen beckoned, placing a blade to his own to Zovarice's flesh. He tapped him with the end of his blade for emphasis. Morrigan's eyes flared, and her hand erupted into flames. Zovarice groaned in pain as the blade dug itself into his flesh a bit. "Come with us peacefully," Cullen said calmly. "Or we kill the boy."

"Mother! NO!"  Zovarice roared, trying to break free of his enemies grasp. No use. Morrigan felt tears sting at her eyes, and the flames enveloping her hands faded away, her head hanging in defeat. Two Templars cautiously edged their way towards her, reluctantly grasping her by the arms. They hauled her off the bed, where she met her son's gaze. "Mother... no..." Zovarice whispered sorrowfully.

"'Twill be okay, my child," Morrigan soothed, forcing a smile.  Zovarice responded with a choked sob. Cullen retracted his blade, and followed the Templars who held Morrigan as they hauled her out the door. Cullen stopped right before he exited, and turned to the two Templars keeping Zovarice in check.

"Kill him." he said, slamming the door shut.

Morrigan's eyes went wide. "No!" she roared, but could not escape her attacker's hold. Cullen struck her hard with the flat of his blade across the face, rendering her unconciouss. Without remorse, he hauled the witch over his shoulder, and left the old hut, on his way towards Denerim, with one thought on his mind:

King Alistair will be pleased.

Modifié par The Gay Warden, 24 janvier 2010 - 06:41 .


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The next chapter'll be out tomorrow, all. Criticism is appreciated!

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I think you meant struck her hard rather than stroke her hard. Easy mistake there :)

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Yeah, what the hell? Sorry, I shouldn't have made that mistake. Hmm. Thanks for pointing that out. Anything else you want to add? :P

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I'm half drunk so no lol

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Rofl. Nice. :)

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Ahh, Tallon, I adore you!

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Chapter Two: The Vision

Gerard and Jaiden continued to walk, as they saw castle Redcliffe come into view in the distance. Wihtout warning, an incredible pain stung at Jaiden's finger--the one holding the ring his lover, Morrigan, had given him nearly seventeen years ago--and he dropped to his knees, unsure of what was happening.

"Ser!" Gerard snapped in concern, running to his Commander's side. Jaiden's eyes went wide, and finally, his vision blurred as he fell to his stomach, the ground, and unconciousness, rushing to greet him.

* * * * *

Zovarice's eyes went wide, and a spell instinctively flashed his mind. The two Templars around him both went fyling in seperate directions, either one of them slamming hard into a wall. Before they could get back up, a second spell came to Zovarice's mind, and they began to scream in pain as the blood inside them boiled.  Zovarice, surprised, looked at his hands in disbelief. Blood magic? he thought. He had never used blood magic before. This was entirely new.

Wasting no time, Zovarice sprinted out the door, comiing to a stop outside. He looked in every direction, but could find no sign or evidence as to where the bastards might've taken his mother. He sunk to his knees in hopelessness. "Mother..." he trailed off in a sad whisper. He had failed her, he soon realized. Rage suddenly built inside of him, and he tore at the grass with his bare hands, pulling dirt out with it. I'll find her, he vowed. I swear it.

* * * * *

Awareness soon found Jaiden, and he found himself in a land of dreams. Though to Jaiden's realization, this wasn't a dream. It was all too real. Ghostly lips touched Jaiden, and teeth nibbled at his ear. He studdied the woman on top of him, and his heart pounded harder than a hammer to an anvil.

"M--Morrigan?" he asked in disbelief, his voice echoing on and on as he spoke.

"My love," Morrigan replied, carressing Jaiden's face with one of her hands as the other lay on his bare chest. "'Tis been awhile since last we spoke."

"Is this... how are you...?"

"The ring, my love." Morrigan answered, stealing another kiss. "I have unlocked it's magic. Though we meet in our dreams, our words are real."

Jaiden soon found himself lost in passion, kissing Morrigan several times, holding her close to him as he put her hand on the back of her head. "All of this time... I searched for you... where did you go, Morrigan?"

"Shh," Morrigan soothed, putting a finger over his lips. "'Tis not important, darling. I have summoned you to share some news. The Templars have found me, my love. I know not what they plan with me, but I fear it's not welcome. From what information I have gathered, it seems Alistair has placed quite the bounty on my head."

"Alistair?" Jaiden mimicked, eyes filled with disbelief. "Why would he do such a thing?"

"I know not, my love." Morrigan replied sorrowfully. "But I must ask a favor of you. Our son--he is a toung adult, now. I once spoke to you of the power he is capable of. I will now clarify that that power is not evil, but good. I... I fear the Templars may have killed our son, my love. His name is Zovarice. Please..." her eyes filled with worry. "Return to Flemeth's hut, where we met so long ago. Our son is there. And I fear he is in more danger than I he, or myself, realize."

Morrigan began to fade away, Jaiden reaching out for her anxiously. "Wait! When will we speek again?"

"Soon, my love." she promised. "Soon."

Jaiden returned to reality, Gerard standing over him. He lay on a bed in a familiar room of Redcliffe astle. "Commander!" his fellow Warden asked in concern. "Are you all right? Can you move? Is it... the taint..?"

Jaiden sat upright in the bed, running a hand over his worried features. "It was not the taint." he said, shaking his head.

Gerard's brows knitted together. "Then, what?" he asked.

Jaiden thought before replying. Eventually, he spoke, avoiding the answer to Gerard's question. "We must leave this place at once."

"What? Why?" asked Gerard. "You aren't making any sense, Com--"

"Please," Jaiden stopped him. "If you will not accompany me, then I will go alone. Though I need your help."

There was a silence as the Commander's pupil sighed, shaking his head. "Of course I'll go with you, old man," he laughed, clasping his superior on the shoulder. "Even unto death."

A smile tugged at Jaiden's lips. "And of that, I have no doubt."

Modifié par The Gay Warden, 25 janvier 2010 - 12:54 .


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hooray 4 alchohol and hangovers!

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Rofl. You guys... *sniff*



Okay, seriously, does anyone have any input as to the actual writing? :P

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I noticed several spelling mistakes, but honestly, they didn't distract me from your story. Love it!

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Yes, that's my pet peeve, the spelling errors. Grr. I don't think I'll ever master that. :'(



Anyways, I hope you truly liked it. I'll improve on the spelling as time progresses. Thanks for the comment!

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The best way I've found to help with spelling is to read the story outloud to yourself. That makes you stop and look at every word. It helps tons. Otherwise, this keeps getting more and more interesting. Keep it up!

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Thanks!

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You must worship the spellchecker and make ritual sacrifices to it daily with vodka and orange juice...



Here's what I recommend. After you finish writing up a chapter walk away from it. Don't touch it at all. Go do something else to clear your head out like playing Dragon Age Origins (hehe). Then come back and re-read the whole thing you wrote. I'm betting you'll spot any errors like spelling or words that aren't suppose to be there =)

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Will do. :P

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Very nicely written chapters. I honestly can't think of any criticism that others have not already said. Keep it up!

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tallon1982 wrote...

You must worship the spellchecker and make ritual sacrifices to it daily with vodka and orange juice...


better with MD and blue koolaid

just sayin

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MarcusDeVarro wrote...

tallon1982 wrote...

You must worship the spellchecker and make ritual sacrifices to it daily with vodka and orange juice...


better with MD and blue koolaid

just sayin


You guys!! Captin Morgan and coke.

Seriously though, You said you were in your youth. Have you ever read/heard of the 'Fabelhaven' series? I believe the authors name is Brandon Mull. He was 15 when his first book was published. It's quite popular. I know, because I work at a book store. Your doing a great job. 

 I like that someone has been thinking of Morrigan and the baby  outcome.

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Long Island Ice Tea anyone?



@Phoenix- is it any good, if it is ill have to get my hand on the series
until then i will be waiting for the final Eragon book

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Thanks, Pheonix. Next chapter later today!

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Chapter Three: Revelations

Eyes burning with hatred, and heart beating with revenge, Zovarice returned to the hut. The two Templars inside lay dead on the floor, faces twisted unnaturally, due to the spell. Zovarice stepped over one, and to the bed his mother had been sleeping in. There, he turned it on its side, sending it crashing towards the floor. He searched eagerly with his hands, until he met a small indention. His fingers grasped the indention, and he pulled, and watched as the floor opened up before him.

There was a ladder descending below, and he graped the rungs, beginning his descent. The air became thick, and a horrible smell filled his nose. He ignored it, and continued to repel. Soon, his vision failed him, and he stopped a moment, a spell coming to mind. Immidiately, the dark cavern became lit, but there was no immidiate source of light. Magic was a marvelous thing. Finally, Zovarice reached the ladder's end, and glanced around, spotting a tunnel which stretched on and on. Sighing in exasperation, Zovarice moved his legs, and made his way down the dark, deep trek.

* * * * *

"It is unfortunate you have to leave so soon," Arl Teagen said with a frown. He had taken up position of Arl after the previous Arl--Eamen--had retired ten years before, and died only five years earlier.
 
"Yes, I do apoligize though, old friend." Jaiden replied.

"May I ask why the rush?" Teagen attempted.

"King's business, I'm afraid. Alistair wants to keep things quiet." lied Jaiden, and without a hint of showing so, Gerard noted.

"Well," Teagen sighed. "It was nice of you to help. I'll let the King know if we see any more Darkspawn around. Maker watch over you, friend."

"Maker watch over us all." 

With that, the two Warden's turned, leaving castle Redcliffe. Nearly thirty minutes into the trip, Gerard became curious, and interrupted the silent pitter-patter of horse hooves with his voice. "Commander?" he asked sheepishly.

"Hmm?" was Jaiden's reply, somewhat distant.

"If you don't mind my asking, where exactly are we going? I'd rather not travel blindly."

There was a pause. "If you must know, the Korcari Wilds. Though I will not get into too much depth about it."

Gerard's experience had told him that that was as much out of Jaiden that he was going to get. He nodded glumly, and focused his attention on the road.

* * * * *

Cullen pushed open Palace Denerim's gates, shoving Morrigan in before he entered. She grunted in frustration, and wiggled her fingers as though she were to choke him. She might have, too, had her hands not been bound together. The two entered the Palace's main chamber, where the King of Ferelden reside. On the throne, she saw Alistair, and her anger flared.

"You bastard!" she roared, attempting to charge forward. Cullen restrained her, and pushed her onto her knees.

"You will show the King respect!" he roared, raising his back hand in order to strike her.

"Enough!" Alistair boomed from his throne with uncommon anger. Cullen's hand was caught in the air by his words. "Knight Commander, leave. Now." he ordered.

Cullen bowed. "As you wish, my lord." And then he exited, leaving Morrigan on her knees before the King. There was an odd silence as Morrigan eyed him in total disgust. He would have already been lit to flames, if Morrigan's magic had allowed itself to work. However, the cuffs at her wrists also drained her mana. One of the Templars' many toys.

Alistair cleared his throat awkwardly. "I... am sorry I had to drag you here like this. I needed to talk to you."

"You needed to talk to me?!" replied Morrigan, her rage sparking like a thousand lightning bolts. "Because of you, my son is dead!"

Alistair looked dumbstruck. "Son?" he echoed. "What son?" 

"Has Jaiden not told you?" Morrigan seethed. "My son.  His son. Our son."

Alistair's face became even more confused looking. "W--wait... what?" he asked.

"The night before we slayed the Archdemon, he and I had a child." she explained, as though a teacher to a student--an ignorant, stupid student at that. "That is why Jaiden did not die when the Archdemon was slain."

"How does this--?"

"Enough," Morrigan spat. "I will not lecture an idiot beyond capability such as yourself." There were tears in her eyes now, as she thought of Zovarice. Her head dropped, and her gaze landed on the floor. She looked depressed, Alistair noted. Sad. He had never seen her like this before. A knot formed in his stomach, and guilt was placed on his shoulders.

"I... I am sorry." he repeated in pure sincerity.

Morrigan chuckled, her gaze still towards the floor. "Sorry?" she mocked. "My son may be dead! You took me from my home, away from my child!" She looked up, meeting him straight in the eyes with weary tears. "But how relieved am I to hear that you're sorry!" She looked towards the floor once more, sobbing. Alistair didn't know hot to reply to that. So instead he said nothing. "Why have you brought me here?" Morrigan suddenly asked, voice hoarse.

"I... Your mother. Flemeth, she... she showed up in the Palace nearly two weeks ago." Alistair explained. Morrigan's eyes went wide. Flemeth? she thought. Jaiden had slain Flemeth nearly seventeen years ago, after Morrigan discovered Flemeth would possess her body. It was always apparent to the witch that her mother would return, but Morrigan had all but forgotten about her mother. Alistair continued. "Where was I? Oh... she showed up one day, like I said... and then she mentioned my Father. Maric. Apparently, they met a long time ago... and he promised her something. Now Flemeth is here to live up to that promise, I suppose."

"Promise?" Morrigan questioned. "What promise?"

"She said..." Alistair paused. "She told me that the 'Dawn of the Gods' was upon us. That soon, all of Ferelden, would descend into darkness. She explained it wouldn't be a blight, that no Grey Warden will be able to stop it... that we have no chance of surviving." He swallowed, hard. "And she also said that I'm going to be the cause of all of this."

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