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Fanfiction - I Am Duty and Honor
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Miliat
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#27
Posté 31 janvier 2010 - 10:10
Freckles04
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You have really captured the resignation and inevitability she must feel. I feel so bad for her. Well done.
#28
Posté 01 février 2010 - 12:28
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Freckles04 wrote...
You have really captured the resignation and inevitability she must feel. I feel so bad for her. Well done.
Absolutely, well done!
#29
Posté 01 février 2010 - 05:37
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thats how i pictured Eamon acting when he awoke
perfectly captured
perfectly captured
#30
Posté 01 février 2010 - 08:49
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Very nice. Loed how bittersweet it is.
#31
Posté 02 février 2010 - 03:41
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Part 15: Sink
This one is a bit more lighthearted than most of the entries have been, and i hope it isn't a terrible departure from the overall story. I just felt it was getting a bit bogged down with all the doom and gloom and needed a bit of lifting. Don't worry though, the more dramatic bits will be back.
And Marcus, yeah, as noble as the game wants to make Eamon seem, I could only see him being very cold to the character who chose to sacrifice his wife. I am not convinced by all the "Well you saved two of us, let one of us die, I guess I shouldn't be upset with you" demeanor. The man had to harbor some bad blood there, even though you saved him.
AA, Freckles, and Sisimka, I'm glad you are liking the characterization. I think as much as I love my rogueish Cousland in game, I believe my heart will always belong to my dear Lady Aeducan here.
This one is a bit more lighthearted than most of the entries have been, and i hope it isn't a terrible departure from the overall story. I just felt it was getting a bit bogged down with all the doom and gloom and needed a bit of lifting. Don't worry though, the more dramatic bits will be back.
And Marcus, yeah, as noble as the game wants to make Eamon seem, I could only see him being very cold to the character who chose to sacrifice his wife. I am not convinced by all the "Well you saved two of us, let one of us die, I guess I shouldn't be upset with you" demeanor. The man had to harbor some bad blood there, even though you saved him.
AA, Freckles, and Sisimka, I'm glad you are liking the characterization. I think as much as I love my rogueish Cousland in game, I believe my heart will always belong to my dear Lady Aeducan here.
#33
Posté 02 février 2010 - 01:01
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Nice. I like her train of thought at the end. Payback! LOL!
#34
Posté 02 février 2010 - 01:56
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Ooooo, nicely done!!!! Love the ending! More please!
#35
Posté 03 février 2010 - 01:14
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FanFiction.net is being mean to me about uploading the next part, so here it is for all of you to enjoy. (I will edit it after submitting, because this place is EVIL with formatting)
Edit 1: This bit is titled "Guilt"
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He diverts any conversation that I try to have with him about the Landsmeet.
For a while it was just completely random things thrown at me whenever I opened my mouth with what he calls the “too serious look” on my face. I have heard about 30 different types of cheese and how each one is a delight of the senses. I have heard about pillow fights. Paragons help me, but everything out of his mouth makes me laugh. I want to talk to him about it, to get his perspective past the whole I-never-asked-to-be-king attitude he presented at Redcliffe.
We're camped just inside the Brecilian Forest, following almost imperceptible trails of what we hope are the Dalish. I feel as if the trees are watching us, the leaves seem to rustle when there is no breeze, limbs bending in disapproval at our presence. I do not like this place. I will be happy when we find the elves.
Leliana kept me by her tent most of the night, not allowing me my usual place by Alistair at dinner, and talking incessantly about what the ancestor's only know. When she gets excited her accent makes it hard for me to understand her words. So I was completely taken by surprise by her question. I think I almost put the fire out with the water that came spurting from my mouth. She actually asked if I had taken him to bed yet. She wanted to know all the sordid details. Of course, I had none to give her, and was just barely saved from more of her queries by him.
I could see the sneer on his face as he looked back at Leliana, at the same time leading me to the other side of the camp. We talked for a while. More like he talked and I laughed. In the middle of it all I remembered I had forgotten something I had meant to do. I left him sitting there while I went to my pack, pulling out a small necklace I had found in Redcliffe Castle before we had even went after the Urn.
I am not sure why I held onto it for so long. Perhaps I was waiting on a better moment, or perhaps the long hard drive to save the Arl's life had completely put it out of my mind until now. I wasn't even sure If it was the same amulet he had mentioned before, but it had obviously been repaired after long ago.
When I presented it to him, the look on his face almost broke my heart. Before I knew what was happening know he was pressing me to him in such an embrace that I could not breathe. He was mumbling thank yous, and I could hear the wavering in his voice as his emotions threatened to break over him. I don't know how long we sat like that. Even with my inability to breathe properly, I did not want to break from his embrace. It just felt right. It was the gagging noises from Morrigan that finally made us separate.
I feel so guilty for this feeling. Guilty because there is so much suffering around us, so much at stake, and here I am happy. Happy because if none of it had happened, I would never have known him. To think I could have went my entire life without the sound of his laugh, his shield at my back, or the beauty of his eyes is almost incomprehensible. He has healed something in me, and I feel so utterly irresponsible for enjoying it.
Edit 1: This bit is titled "Guilt"
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He diverts any conversation that I try to have with him about the Landsmeet.
For a while it was just completely random things thrown at me whenever I opened my mouth with what he calls the “too serious look” on my face. I have heard about 30 different types of cheese and how each one is a delight of the senses. I have heard about pillow fights. Paragons help me, but everything out of his mouth makes me laugh. I want to talk to him about it, to get his perspective past the whole I-never-asked-to-be-king attitude he presented at Redcliffe.
We're camped just inside the Brecilian Forest, following almost imperceptible trails of what we hope are the Dalish. I feel as if the trees are watching us, the leaves seem to rustle when there is no breeze, limbs bending in disapproval at our presence. I do not like this place. I will be happy when we find the elves.
Leliana kept me by her tent most of the night, not allowing me my usual place by Alistair at dinner, and talking incessantly about what the ancestor's only know. When she gets excited her accent makes it hard for me to understand her words. So I was completely taken by surprise by her question. I think I almost put the fire out with the water that came spurting from my mouth. She actually asked if I had taken him to bed yet. She wanted to know all the sordid details. Of course, I had none to give her, and was just barely saved from more of her queries by him.
I could see the sneer on his face as he looked back at Leliana, at the same time leading me to the other side of the camp. We talked for a while. More like he talked and I laughed. In the middle of it all I remembered I had forgotten something I had meant to do. I left him sitting there while I went to my pack, pulling out a small necklace I had found in Redcliffe Castle before we had even went after the Urn.
I am not sure why I held onto it for so long. Perhaps I was waiting on a better moment, or perhaps the long hard drive to save the Arl's life had completely put it out of my mind until now. I wasn't even sure If it was the same amulet he had mentioned before, but it had obviously been repaired after long ago.
When I presented it to him, the look on his face almost broke my heart. Before I knew what was happening know he was pressing me to him in such an embrace that I could not breathe. He was mumbling thank yous, and I could hear the wavering in his voice as his emotions threatened to break over him. I don't know how long we sat like that. Even with my inability to breathe properly, I did not want to break from his embrace. It just felt right. It was the gagging noises from Morrigan that finally made us separate.
I feel so guilty for this feeling. Guilty because there is so much suffering around us, so much at stake, and here I am happy. Happy because if none of it had happened, I would never have known him. To think I could have went my entire life without the sound of his laugh, his shield at my back, or the beauty of his eyes is almost incomprehensible. He has healed something in me, and I feel so utterly irresponsible for enjoying it.
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#38
Posté 03 février 2010 - 01:08
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MarcusDeVarro wrote...
aawww
Me too, awwww.
#39
Posté 03 février 2010 - 04:48
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Would anyone be willing to Beta the future bits for me? I'm noticing a lot of superfluous words and a few mistakes always a day after posting them, and its driving me batty.
#40
Posté 05 février 2010 - 01:27
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Part 17: Stories is up.
Just a note, I have a tendency to put DCFC's "Meet Me on the Equinox" on repeat when I write these entries. Some other songs have been played while writing, but that one just sticks to this story.
Just a note, I have a tendency to put DCFC's "Meet Me on the Equinox" on repeat when I write these entries. Some other songs have been played while writing, but that one just sticks to this story.
#41
Posté 05 février 2010 - 01:34
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This was a nice entry. I can see why you chose that song in particular and it does set the tone rather well.
btw I am willing to look over anything you have as well. My inbox is always open so to speak
btw I am willing to look over anything you have as well. My inbox is always open so to speak
#42
Posté 05 février 2010 - 02:25
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loved it as always
i would offer to read over anything for you, but i'm not to good at spotting grammer and spelling mistakes that spellcheck misses
i would offer to read over anything for you, but i'm not to good at spotting grammer and spelling mistakes that spellcheck misses
#43
Posté 21 mars 2010 - 04:39
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Part 18: Shield
It's been way too long since I updated. This chapter has been sitting unedited for almost a month. Thanks to Freckles and Tallon for being extremely patient Beta's.
It's been way too long since I updated. This chapter has been sitting unedited for almost a month. Thanks to Freckles and Tallon for being extremely patient Beta's.
#44
Posté 21 mars 2010 - 04:46
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No problem, Milia. Coming back to this story was like a nice long siiiigh. I love the voice of your heroine.
#45
Posté 21 mars 2010 - 05:46
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Freckles04 wrote...
No problem, Milia. Coming back to this story was like a nice long siiiigh. I love the voice of your heroine.
I'm going to try and find time to write more of it. I love my Aeducan. As much as I love my other characters, I feel a closeness to this one more than the others.
#46
Posté 21 mars 2010 - 08:22
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Great to see you posting again, Miliat, I've been waiting! Wonderful chapter, so thoughtful. I can't wait to see what she does in Orzammar.
#47
Posté 21 mars 2010 - 08:53
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Just read through all of this. It's so lovely. I haven't played a dwarf yet because I think I would find the story too bittersweet for me - but thankfully I don't have to because I can read about your lady. The writing is so melancholy and beautiful. Keep it up.
#48
Posté 23 mars 2010 - 06:30
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Nice story, like the way you present it as a diary
#49
Posté 23 mars 2010 - 11:01
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Sisi, I'm actually anticipating the Orzammar chapters myself. Things originally plotted want to come out completely different.
Miri, I do recommend trying the Dwarf Noble origin at some point, it really is one of the more fascinating bits of story.
Moemie, the diary format I thought would be easiest to do since this was my first adventure into fanfiction. I am pretty content with how it is turning out.
Miri, I do recommend trying the Dwarf Noble origin at some point, it really is one of the more fascinating bits of story.
Moemie, the diary format I thought would be easiest to do since this was my first adventure into fanfiction. I am pretty content with how it is turning out.
