Yeah, I stopped reading your post after this. Not gonna bother.
Anyway, back to the game. I like to think there's more promise here than Remember Me, mostly in terms of the elaborate usage of time travel.
That maybe come of as kind of mean (or was it? It seems appropriate to ask where people get their expertise), so I got rid of it, but I still feel the point remains. Honestly criticism is kind of unnatural thing. Sitting at a computer, interacting with fictional people, and typing up stuff is highly irregular and unnatural. It seems paradoxical to judge fiction from the standpoint of a cloistered non-real bubble. My experience with actual people says some conversations are highly random, irregular, and silly, awkward, whatever, some conversations are not, whatever.
People say whatever they say, it's not "natural" or "unnatural," if they said it, it's natural. If someone thought it, it's natural, where else could it come from? The more interesting question is whether people want to hear it. In my experience with actual people, talking to actual people, conversations are sometimes very random and chaotic and awkward, and that's natural, and that's fine, expecting everyone to talk entirely in movie lines is pretty unnatural.
As to that, I think people should just ask themselves whether they are cringing because it's honest, to be even more to the point I think the characters and stories are hitting a bit too close too home. Max, Chloe, all these people aren't just rolling around saying any other thing, they're supposed to sound weird or different, or at least that's how I see it, a lot of gamers want people to believe they are Max Stonefire, ace lieutenant, shagger of exotic foreign women, full of whipping one liners and crackling wit. The problem is if anything is unnatural, it's that, most people look like Max, if it's not awkward, it's not real, not to mention you know some people don't think Max Stonefire is all that interesting anyway.
Honestly if you want to avoid everything else based off that fine, but it wasn't intended to be malicious, it's asking what is it that people are really talking about here, I've seen other points like the game tries to encourage certain "correct" decisions, and the fact that the re-wind mechanic is basically to save/reloading, and that it's only one episode, that make sense to me, but this dialogue stuff isn't one of them. All in all, my ESP is just picking up the extreme haste with which people are rushing to criticize this thing or that thing and at a certain point that's far more interesting than the game itself, it suggests that, whoever these people are, however unnatural or awkward they may seem to whoever, they are in fact, the opposite of unrealistic, they are in fact quite real.
It is a real thing that some people try very hard to imitate being "real," try desperately even, that's real, and that's fine.
If you were to ask whether I found some of the characters annoying well, yes, the teacher was very annoying, the principal was iffy, but the rest were pretty interesting to me, Chloe was even more interesting, which is more than I found in Remember Me, and more than I've found in a lot of games.