You were? I don't remember having to do that. Anyway, coukd you be more specific about how you'd improve the execution?
ok "my Hawke", if it makes you happier. "I" is much shorter and of the same meaning.
Hmm..how to make it better (to me)? Making it more nuanced and use less cheesy dialogues would be a start, I think. Treat your audience as the adults that they are. The mature label sadly only exits for gore, profanity and nudity. Or maybe it's because people want to turn their brain off and just go kill stuff for fun? That's really fine, perhaps I'm the weirdo here. Ideally, I want to be able to treat a game story plot in the same way I would treat a novel, perhaps it is impossible.
I wanted for the game to make me care about Andres without making it so obvious from the beginning that I should romance him for max effect in tragedy, it spoiled the surprise and made me a cynic, after that butchered romance attempt I was set to not care. I wanted for the game to make me care about Fenris struggles without him going on and on with his brooding, it made him flat in my eyes, to show that he used to be a slave instead of him telling me that, to show me something else about him too, let me explore the character, be surprised, peel the layers. Anders sort of had an excuse to be flat and single-minded, the others? Most of the characters in DA2 are left unexplored. The most interesting conversation I had in DA2 was with Arishok, for all the pseudo-philosophy that it was. I wanted him as my companion, he was interesting and tragically deluded, I couldn't get enough of him and I wanted to learn more. Flemeth for all her short appearances always manages to be interesting and complex.
Hawke's one dimensional personality was no help either, sure the sarcasm was witty, but push that button one time too often and I really can't take anything that happens around me seriously, I've joined the "f it" wagon. I can sit now and analyze about how it made Hawke a broken character and tragic, but while playing the story I felt, like you yourself have said, that I was watching an episode of Buffy. Maybe other people like it, I'd like something different. The other personalities were just as flat, but less witty. The atmosphere in the mother ark was taken straight from a B Movie horror set and there was the obligatory "drum roll" scene of "look! Hawke is suffering". I'd like less of that.
I'm not even going to talk about act 3 because, seriously, is there anyone who thinks it was good?