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[Al Foley]

https://www.fanficti...t/s/11098004/1/

 

This is the story of the aftermath of Benjamin Trevelyan's journey as Inquisitor,  and doing all the good stuff they did in Inquisition.  So yes.  Obviously Spoilers.  Staring Benjamin Trevlyan, Varric Tethras, Cassandra Pentaghast, and a whole slew of new characters.  So enjoy, if you dare.  

[Al Foley]

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[Al Foley]

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[Al Foley]

here we go.  

[Al Foley]

So chapter five is now live....and that was unintentional.  

[Al Foley]

Well this story does not seem to be gaining any traction.  https://www.fanficti...n-Ordered-World

[Al Foley]

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Reviews welcome.  

[Al Foley]

One more down.  https://www.fanficti...n-Ordered-World

[QueenCrow]

While I don't want to wrinkle up the mojo you've got going here, you posted that reviews are welcome...

 

Your latest chapter is my new favorite, replacing my former fav, "The Last Honest Templar"  I think it's the tension in this new chapter, the assault you've created.  

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And I can relate to the feeling you convey when you write about everything grinding to a halt after Corypheus- everyone sitting around on their fat asses.  That's what it feels like.  Nothing but crickets chirping.  Or just nothing.  And I love the way your imagination has conjured something exciting - a threat from within - to fill in that stifling void.

 

Well done.  Thank you for sharing your story!

[Al Foley]

While I don't want to wrinkle up the mojo you've got going here, you posted that reviews are welcome...

 

Your latest chapter is my new favorite, replacing my former fav, "The Last Honest Templar"  I think it's the tension in this new chapter, the assault you've created.  

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And I can relate to the feeling you convey when you write about everything grinding to a halt after Corypheus- everyone sitting around on their fat asses.  That's what it feels like.  Nothing but crickets chirping.  Or just nothing.  And I love the way your imagination has conjured something exciting - a threat from within - to fill in that stifling void.

 

Well done.  Thank you for sharing your story!

You are welcome.  

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Actually also that chapter came apart because I really did not like the idea of a 'siege on skyhold' type of storyline, even though if I were doing DA I I would have included one...but really it does not fit my story.

A. it is a bit cliche.

B. it does not fit given the power of the Inquisition.

A shadow war made a whole lot more sense to me and an internal raid. That someone, if they were smart, would not strike at the Inquisition directly, but would come at them at an angle. For Durnham's plan to succeed he needs the Inquisition decapitated.

 

Also glad you enjoyed LHT, bit worried about that one thematicaly and writting style.  

 

Also, new chapter.  

[Al Foley]

So posted this a while ago but did not have a chance to update it here.  Now I do.  Enjoy.

 

Also new chapter should actually be coming soon.  Read and reviews are always appreciated.  

[Al Foley]

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Chapter 11 is now....being posted here.  Sorry for the delay of this but...well it seems only one person cares.

[TheChosenOne]

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Chapter 11 is now....being posted here.  Sorry for the delay of this but...well it seems only one person cares.

 

I care! This is one nice fanfic! Keep up the good work,bro!

 

 

I'm curious about your Inquisition ending. What kind of Inquisition power did you have? 

[Al Foley]

I care! This is one nice fanfic! Keep up the good work,bro!

 

 

I'm curious about your Inquisition ending. What kind of Inquisition power did you have? 

Ohhhhh God.  I wanna say military but I am not sure.  

 

I am pretty sure though and if its military Ben Trevelyan views it as being neccessary to defeat Corypheus and then after the fact he gears it down to be more diplomatic. lol.  Not to stress the cliche they used during development but Benjamin's Inquisition post Corypheus is more like the Jedi Order.  

[QueenCrow]

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Chapter 11 is now....being posted here.  Sorry for the delay of this but...well it seems only one person cares.

 

 

This forum really isn't all that great for feedback.  Sometimes posting here feels like putting a chapter into a bottle and casting it into the sea. I'm reading your work, though, enjoying it, and will take the time to click the like button so that you know someone is reading LOL

[Al Foley]

This forum really isn't all that great for feedback.  Sometimes posting here feels like putting a chapter into a bottle and casting it into the sea. I'm reading your work, though, enjoying it, and will take the time to click the like button so that you know someone is reading LOL

Same thing on the website it is posting on to. 

[Andromelek]

I just read the first three chapters, great Job Man!

[Al Foley]

I just read the first three chapters, great Job Man!

Thank you.  

 

Sorry everyone for not posting of late I have run into some issues the last couple of days that makes it hard for me to finish editing the chapter I was working on.  Maker Willing the next chapter will be up sometime this week and then we can wrap this rodeo up.  

[Al Foley]

New chapter is up.  

[Al Foley]

It has been a long while, but, well I am still writing more or less.  And hey, here is a new chapter.  (don't kill me)

[Al Foley]

I just posted a new chapter.  One more to go.  Could have it up soon already started writing it. Sooooo sorry about the delay.  

[Al Foley]

So here it is the final Chapter of this lovely fan fic.  

 

Thank you to all the people reading, enjoying, liking, and reviewing.