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[LdyShayna]

I started this before Dragon Age's released, and was VERY pleased with how well the characters I made in the first two chapters meshed with the characters in the game.

I know there's quite a bit of the game's dialog in some of the chapters.  I'm trying to get away from that, but many of the early events really needed to be covered, in my mind.  Hopefully it flows well enough with the rest of the writing to not be too jarring. 

Anyway, always looking for feedback and ways I can improve.

Also, I'm giving a link to fanfic.net.  If you would prefer to read it within the forum, let me know and I can do that too/instead.  I've had a rough month at work, so I've been to tired to work on it for the last couple of weeks, but I do have a couple more chapters mostly done at the moment in need of editing.

http://www.fanfictio.../1/Mariahs_Tale
http://www.fanfictio.../2/Mariahs_Tale
http://www.fanfictio.../3/Mariahs_Tale
http://www.fanfictio.../4/Mariahs_Tale
http://www.fanfictio.../5/Mariahs_Tale
http://www.fanfictio.../6/Mariahs_Tale
http://www.fanfictio.../7/Mariahs_Tale


EDIT:  I just realized I am a moderator on this forum.  Umm...don't let that influence you when giving feedback, accept for following normal forum rules.  Really. 

Modifié par LdyShayna, 04 février 2010 - 02:32 .

[Maria Caliban]

Holy [sweet potato]. This is the best [knit]ing [mittens] fanfiction I've ever read!

I was really disappointed that there was no Cousland/Elven servant girl love though.

Modifié par Maria Caliban, 04 février 2010 - 03:16 .

[LdyShayna]

Maria Caliban wrote...

Holy ****. This is the best ****ing **** fanfiction I've ever read!

You're ignoring that last part, aren't ya?

I was really disappointed that there was no Cousland/Elven servant girl love though.

Well, if it makes you feel any better, she used to help Mariah bathe - knowledge which I plan to have Leliana use to torture Alistair later on.

But I'm not there yet!

[Maria Caliban]

I was under the impression that asterisks were allowed under forum rules. Sorry, I shall change it.

LdyShayna wrote...

Well, if it makes you feel any better, she used to help Mariah bathe - knowledge which I plan to have Leliana use to torture Alistair later on.

But I'm not there yet!

Thank you. It does make me feel better.

[TheMadCat]

I was under the impression that asterisks were allowed under forum rules. Sorry, I shall change it.

Shot in the dark here but I think she made that comment because of how overly ecstatic you were and felt the moderator tag way have had an influence in it, which LdyShayna does not want.



As for the story, I'll get around reading it. Looks good from a quick skim, though this particular premise has been beaten to death so hopefully you spiced it up a bit.

[TheMadCat]

Got around to reading most of it. Pretty good, especially from a technical standpoint, but like I said the general idea of the story has been beaten to death so it's kind of got that "been there, done that" feel to it. Keep it up though, I'll be checking on it.

[Marny63]

I think I have Glitch or has the noble human story been changed??? I start out in cuisland castle nothing changed untill ostegard , the king no longer recognise the charitor as a cusiland and think there from redclift because of a accent?? a redclift farm hold has castle and a small army ??, Did Bio change this? or is there a fix for it if its glitch, I want the old story line back not this redcleft farmer crap. can some one help please or can bioware respond?
Thanks