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[ToshiStation38]

That second chapter was painfully drawn out. It's very well written, but I can't really swap my Shepard in. It's not my story though, so I shouldn't complain.

[Titan98RG]

firecleaner wrote...

Rathias0114 wrote...

aeetos21 wrote...

Titan98RG wrote...

JobacNoor wrote...

Since we're on the subject of fan fiction, I ran into something that I thought deserved to be shared: Link

this was good.  thanks for sharing.

I read the first chapter as soon as I finished ME2, didn't see the update though. Good story  =)

That fan-fic makes mine look like a joke, haha.

yours is good keep it up!

agreed, i'm looking forward to reading it.

[Nightvision91]

I like that we as Mirimaniacs can post bits of our fan fictions on here, and give each other good critiques and advice.

[Andysilv]

The first chapter of that Atlas story was a good read. As Toshi said though, it's difficult to really put your Shepard in there which makes it a little bit difficult to get into.

[Rathias0114]

@Andy;



It's difficult no matter what Shepard you use, in my opinion. Your Shepard might not have the same path of logic as my Shepard - etc, etc.

[Valmy]

Besides writing steamy sex scenes what would I write about I wonder? Shep and Miri would be working on tying up loose ends and starting to take the next step against the Reapers...but I am not sure what that might be...

[Titan98RG]

true, plus when the first name came up...that totally brought me out of the flow.

[Nightvision91]

I have to agree. If you write a Mass Effect story Shepard has to be Shepard. Writing about your Shepard who thinks about his time on Earth won't resonate with the people who chose a Spacer Shepard.

[ToshiStation38]

Okay, Rath, sorry in advance for murdering your story, but if you find it gets too depressing, just do this:

Shepard
for extravehicular activities, slide to a sitting position, hands
resting on the head leaned - he, g - Joker and the radius of the press
felt deeply EDI Normandy to get a boat explosion and fill the power of
the collector taking breath on his chest. As he looked at the exit door - he could not help it, you realize how lucky you were.

They are going to say it is from there it was - but they did. It was a suicide mission - but lived. If luck, skill, or that the shepherd had been purely to help the team get to live with him in his place. They should have made it - but they did.

Open
the airlock door hissed - and, in the doorway, standing blood Blot
Miranda - who was lucky enough to cover her white clothes separate the
method of notification.

She said, "Are you okay He raised his eyebrows."

He got up beside him, grabbed his body erupted in pain sensation. He saw a hand, and his realization of his suit had been ruptured and was bleeding everywhere.

He
Miranda, she worried look on his face, she immediately looked at his
bloody hands, "We have to reach clinics - on the face looked to be
coming now."

Shepard, and his blurred vision to take a step forward - he stumbled into the arms of Miranda. He looked up at her, tears started to form in the second.

"Miranda ..."

".. Please do not me, the shepherd will not - promise!"

He reached up, touched her cheek, smirking, "I know ... so sorry ..."

We
had started the tears flowing freely now, her words of protest "and,
no, no, no - I can, damnit I can not lose is if not now!"

He
has to stand up straight, while she put a kiss at the end of all his
power, staring into the ashes of her deep blue eyes, he said, "I,
Miranda, I love you," murmured

He last saw his most precious in the world is one thing - he was overtaken in the dark as was the face with a smile.

He is a cry for help to her, holding her hand in his faded.

Modifié par ToshiStation38, 15 février 2010 - 09:12 .

[Rathias0114]

Nightvision91 wrote...

I have to agree. If you write a Mass Effect story Shepard has to be Shepard. Writing about your Shepard who thinks about his time on Earth won't resonate with the people who chose a Spacer Shepard.

The thing is - what defines the "true" Shepard? The default one? Or your's?

[Andysilv]

Ha, I knew you'd run it through the translator! This part I found very amusing: "while she put a kiss at the end of all his power..." a bit suggestive for the first chapter if I may say so

[Rathias0114]

@Toshi;



/facepalm

[Nightvision91]

Ugh sorry double post.

Modifié par Nightvision91, 15 février 2010 - 09:17 .

[Nightvision91]

Rathias0114 wrote...

Nightvision91 wrote...

I have to agree. If you write a Mass Effect story Shepard has to be Shepard. Writing about your Shepard who thinks about his time on Earth won't resonate with the people who chose a Spacer Shepard.

The thing is - what defines the "true" Shepard? The default one? Or your's?

That's a good point. I wouldn't mind reading about someone else's Shepard, but in the end I think mine is better sadly. Though I have read some great ME stories based on player created Shepards. So I think it is a fine line to walk.

[ToshiStation38]

Just leave it ambiguous. Surely someone can write a decent fanfic without delving into Shepard's pre-service history and military accomplishments (other than the obvious ones).

[Rathias0114]

ToshiStation38 wrote...

Just leave it ambiguous. Surely someone can write a decent fanfic without delving into Shepard's pre-service history and military accomplishments (other than the obvious ones).

That's actually a lot harder than you might think.

Shepard's past ultimately helped shape his future.

A Sole Survivor understands what it means to go into the mouth of death - and walk out alone.
A ruthless might - but not to the same degree.
A War Hero might - but not to the same degree.

How could an earthborn know what life living in space is? Or what is was like growing up with parents? There are so many emotional things tied to Shepard's past that to live it ambigious would be too difficult.

[Nightvision91]

ToshiStation38 wrote...

Just leave it ambiguous. Surely someone can write a decent fanfic without delving into Shepard's pre-service history and military accomplishments (other than the obvious ones).

That hopefully is the line I'm walking in he current ME fanfic I'm writing. Sort of just took the cannon Shepard, and tweaked him here and there. I dwell a little about his time as a spacer, and just a little look back at his war hero moment.

Modifié par Nightvision91, 15 février 2010 - 09:22 .

[Nightvision91]

Well I need to head out for a bit. Keep up the good fight.

[aeetos21]

I have been meaning to finish this one story I was writing but I do have a few Mass Effect ideas concerning Shepard and Miranda, only oddity is when people give Shepard a first name.



Which makes sense but its weird since we're all fans and we all name our Shepard something different - so it's weird when you see him/her being referred to as something different.



Anyway, I'll see about posting a one shot or something to contribute to the less than one page Miranda fanfiction cache.

[ToshiStation38]

aeetos21 wrote...

I have been meaning to finish this one story I was writing but I do have a few Mass Effect ideas concerning Shepard and Miranda, only oddity is when people give Shepard a first name.

Which makes sense but its weird since we're all fans and we all name our Shepard something different - so it's weird when you see him/her being referred to as something different.

Yeah. Especially because Shepard is never referred to by his/her first name, I find it strange when authors make the choice to just have it start happening. I barely even associate my Shepard's first name at all with the character. I always figured he'd been referred to as "Shepard" ever since his childhood on Earth.

[DarthReavus]

Ah thank ye Mavi. What is it with these piece o' crap forums tonight? First they load rather slowly and then they manage to lose entire pages within threads, including this one. Surely losing any pages of this thread is blasphemy!

[aeetos21]

Yeah but calling him/her Shepard during times on intamacy? Hell, at least Ash called him Skipper and Kaidan tried to keep things professional (Commander) even when you were basically seducing him.



Oh veil

[Andarthiel_Demigod]

I personally didn't like her. She seemed too much like a Cereberus fanatic and I don't like Cereberus either.
The only thing that I liked about her is the accent and she does look beautiful.
There's one thing I noticed about her though, she has the most realistic human face in the whole game which is kind of eerie. A pity that so far ME hasn't really  had any interesting human companions. I'll take aliens over them any day.

Modifié par Andarthiel_Demigod, 15 février 2010 - 10:05 .

[DarthReavus]

Andarthiel_Demigod wrote...

I personally didn't like her. She seemed too much like a Cereberus fanatic and I don't like Cereberus either.
The only thing that I liked about her is the accent and she does look beautiful.
There's one thing I noticed about her though, she has the most realistic human face in the whole game which is kind of eerie. A pity that so far ME hasn't really  had any interesting human companions. I'll take aliens over them any day.

Probably because the face was a facial scan of her VA, Yvonne Strahovski.  Get to know the character a little more and she'll seem less and less of a Cerberus fanatic, even going as far as to resign from Cerberus at the conclusion of the game provided she's in your team for the human-reaper fight and you elect to destroy the Collector base rather than leave it intact.

EDIT: I'll agree that in ME Ash and Kaidan weren't exactly overly interesting, but then neither was Tali.  Kaidan was there to tell you about the life of a human biotic to give you some context on what biotics are and how they came about.

Tali took that to a whole other level.  If you needed XP or felt you were missing a codex entry somewhere then it was a safe bet to go talk to Tali because she was there to be a walking, talking codex filling you up with codex entries on the Geth and the Quarians.  Not exactly interesting if you ask me.

Garrus was like your protégé so he was quite often asking questions as well as telling you the odd C-Sec tale.  Wrex was interesting to talk to because he always had a story to tell, mostly amusing tales from a Krogan's point of view.

Modifié par DarthReavus, 15 février 2010 - 10:19 .