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[Addai]

nefand wrote...

Addai67 wrote...
@nefand, I am not sure what your point is? That you don't like the Katriel story line? I believe she does consider that she should kill Severan and be done with it, but maybe she has reached a point where even one more murder is too much.

*blinks slowly*

No....

LOL  Ok, I just wasn't tracking.  I am not much of a Katriel fan myself.  Maric could have done better!

[Miri1984]

Addai67 wrote...

A lot of story threads get downgraded to four stars. Either someone is a git, or people are accidentally clicking on the stars instead of the page number.

THIS. Sorry guys, but  my fingers are too big for my iPhone .

[Raonar]

OK, sorry to hijack the discussion but I just had to say how saddened I was that I just got a review from someone who praised my *cough* 220,000+ word story *cough* and I can't send him any sort of message because it was an anonymous review.



I guess I'll write some author's notes to say thanks in the next chapter. I suppose you all have had to deal with this conflicting feeling at some point no?

[LupusYondergirl]

Miri1984 wrote...

Addai67 wrote...

A lot of story threads get downgraded to four stars. Either someone is a git, or people are accidentally clicking on the stars instead of the page number.

THIS. Sorry guys, but  my fingers are too big for my iPhone .

You and me both
I even did it to my own story thread!

Today must be the day of jerk reviewers, though.  Sarah, seriously, don't pay a bit of attention to what that one said.  Your stuff is funny as hell. 

[Raonar]

Oh right! I hadn't checked the previous page.



To Sarah: I would join in and say just how hilarious your stuff is, but you already know how much I laughed form the few reviews I left on such things as "Oh no, not again!"



Maybe that person just has a different sense of humor. Fear not

[nos_astra]

Miri1984 wrote...
Not to be Twilight obsessive, (in an ANTI way) but it's so clear that Bella is Mary Sue according to this. I mean she has NO REDEEMING QUALITIES, yet EVERYONE LOVES HER.

Yet millions of readers and viewers love her and would fight tooth and nail to defend her honor as an interesting character.

I don't think it's necessary that everyone loves the Warden, it seems common that everyone will agree with them or support them (unless the character is "evil" or an antagonist). Whatever the Warden's flaws are, they are often a non-issue for the people around him/her. If a story fails to acknowledge the many flaws of a character, I believe it's called an Anti Sue. Friends or supporters will rarely criticize and if they do this is a betrayal and they are so wrong or this has to be a misunderstanding.

The point of a Mary Sue is, the plot evolves around her. She's the most important person in the universe. She doesn't suffer any repercussions and if she does the obstacles in her way are always meant to be overcome, destroyed, removed ... simply learning to live with them (or even avoid them) and growing (maybe even see the point why things are as they are and you can't force a change) is not an option.

Modifié par klarabella, 13 octobre 2010 - 02:12 .

[Sarah1281]

Okay so Chapter Twenty-Eight: Decision Time is officially up. Since this is the most I've ever worried about a chapter ever, I would really appreciate some feedback from the people who read it.

[LupusYondergirl]

All right, you managed to surprise me. I totally expected her to make the opposite decision right up until the end. I like how you did her internal thought process at the end, too, her indecision and last second regret. It came across really well.



I don't think I've ever seen a story where someone references the casteless as a finite but needed resource, it's usually fear of cruelty to them or indifference. Actually having a DN character see how vital they are to Orzammar's economy as a whole is an interesting twist and makes her motivation for that decision feel really grounded in an honest care for the city instead of just 'it's cruel' or whatever.

[FutileSine]

@Sarah - So I lurk on a lot on the forums - like the dwarf thread, for instance- and I believe that you, yourself, are a Bhelen fan? I was thinking that you were going to make that choice as well...I think its a sign of being a good author that you can place yourself in your characters shoes and makes sure that SHE does what she thinks is best given the information and emotions she feels.



My only little quibble, and I say this hesitantly in light of the huge grammar war we had going on a little while ago is that you use a lot of different ways to add emphasis - sometimes you bold, sometimes you capitalize, sometimes you underline, and sometimes you use italics.... There was one point in the middle where within a few sentences you had used three different ways to emphasize a word. Different strokes for different folks I know....this is just my partiality for italics coming out. 

I think the part I got the biggest kick out was Aunn trying to make sense of Caridin's traps - figuring out why exactly after hundreds of lives and 2 years they weren't able to figure out what she and her group were able to do in an hour. The detailed thought-processes, like Lupus said, were also very well done.

Modifié par FutileSine, 13 octobre 2010 - 03:19 .

[mousestalker]

@Sarah- One small quibble. You mention two traps, one golem and the other is the spirit anvil. There are two golem rooms. One with the traps in the middle, which you omitted and the other with the gas and the levers. Not a big thing, but you said you wanted to know.

[Sarah1281]

Thank you guys so much for the support.

@Lupus: I'm glad you liked it (and were surprised by the end as well). I did have her note that it was cruel but that was more of a 'oh, and that in addition to all the more practical considerations' since I didn't want to go with the traditional 'oh, I'm doing this because it's the right thing to do and that's immoral' reasoning. Aunn really does care about Orzammar even if she has very little idea of how to help it and, even as she's deciding, isn't happy with her decision.
@ FutileSine: Yeah, I can see how that might be confusing. I  Bhelen but after playing going over the Deep Roads section again I didn't feel she could really put him on the throne. She thinks he'd probably make a decent king if he could get the Assembly to listen and not undo all his reforms after his death, but...

Also, I know a lot of people only like italics but I hate to use the same form over and over again so I switch it up. I'm glad you liked it.
@mousestalker: I haven't played through that section in quite some time and I suppose there being two golem rooms explains why I was convinced that the golem room was directly before Caridin but the DA wiki convinced me otherwise. It didn't occur to me that there might be TWO golem rooms...

[Raonar]

Since I really dislike Bhelen, I approve of the chapter



Seriously though, it was well written. I submitted a review full of my ramblings already, I hope you don't take it the wrong way.

[Sarah1281]

Raonar wrote...

Since I really dislike Bhelen, I approve of the chapter

Seriously though, it was well written. I submitted a review full of my ramblings already, I hope you don't take it the wrong way.

I knew you thought that some people were a little too confident of Bhelen's abilities even if he is the dwarven messiah but I honestly wouldn't have guessed that you disliked him. Maybe it'll become clearer when he shows up in your story again.

Of couse, after not crowning him myself I'm sure people who aren't on the BSN would be surprised to find out that I'm a fan.

[Shadow of Light Dragon]

People tend to make a lot of assumptions about an author based on the Warden they happen to have been writing about.

[Aroihkin]

Shadow of Light Dragon wrote...

People tend to make a lot of assumptions about an author based on the Warden they happen to have been writing about.

I have to de-lurk just to lol at this. It's so, so true.

[mousestalker]

Aroihkin wrote...

Shadow of Light Dragon wrote...

People tend to make a lot of assumptions about an author based on the Warden they happen to have been writing about.

I have to de-lurk just to lol at this. It's so, so true.

Very true. Many people have assumed, based upon my writing, that I'm a ginger elven rogue. That's simply not the case. I'm warrior class.  

Modifié par mousestalker, 14 octobre 2010 - 03:16 .

[Aroihkin]

mousestalker wrote...

Aroihkin wrote...

Shadow of Light Dragon wrote...

People tend to make a lot of assumptions about an author based on the Warden they happen to have been writing about.

I have to de-lurk just to lol at this. It's so, so true.

Very true. Many people have assumed, based upon my writing, that I'm a ginger elven rogue. That's simply not the case. I'm warrior class.  

People seemed to think I was something of a prude back when all they had of mine (in this fandom) was Immovable Object. And now that Silver and Scarlet is out there, a lot of folks seem to think that I have a personal dungeon or something. XD

...And I'm sure plenty of folks think I only write teh ghey, too, which would make my Dragonlance readers die laughing.

Speaking of said Dragonlance readers, they all seemed to think I was a fluffy bunny rabbit until, last December, I started actively weaving my much-beloved ~horror~ into The Akara Files. Bricks were shat. Much lolling on my part was had.

And my Skies of Arcadia readers mostly think I'm just plain evil. Which is probably the most accurate image of all!

Just the plot type, approach, etc, that you take in your fanfics can make people think some pretty weird things about the author sometimes. It's not always as specific as "author hates x character", though I've gotten some of that before too. XD ...Of course, I did blow up the canon protagonists in my post-apocalyptic Skies fic. Or did I?

It can be pretty hilarious sometimes. So, I must lol and agree.

Modifié par Aroihkin, 14 octobre 2010 - 03:35 .

[jackkel dragon]

Shadow of Light Dragon wrote...

People tend to make a lot of assumptions about an author based on the Warden they happen to have been writing about.

You're making me afeared of my internet appearance. I just finished planning some nasty things for my story...

[Raonar]

Sarah1281 wrote...

Raonar wrote...

Since I really dislike Bhelen, I approve of the chapter

Seriously though, it was well written. I submitted a review full of my ramblings already, I hope you don't take it the wrong way.

I knew you thought that some people were a little too confident of Bhelen's abilities even if he is the dwarven messiah but I honestly wouldn't have guessed that you disliked him. Maybe it'll become clearer when he shows up in your story again.

Of couse, after not crowning him myself I'm sure people who aren't on the BSN would be surprised to find out that I'm a fan.

Whan I said i disliked him, I was being nice.

It's actually sad that so many people worship him. I mean, he's a murderer AND a spoiled brat at the same time. And he only got as far as he did because his last name happened to be Aeducan. Also, those people that keep saying how he was better than Endrin are more or less naive.

Even Branka thought Endrin was better, and that's saying something.

As for my own story, I'll jsut say that there will be many, many conflicting feelings.

EDIT

Well, at least I won't have to choose between Bhelen and Harrowmont since my protagonist will make someone else king... more or less.


EDIT 2

And about the Twilight deal with Bella... She DOES have a redeemeing quality. She smells tasty.

I dislike twilight BTW

Modifié par Raonar, 14 octobre 2010 - 12:07 .

[Sarah1281]

Raonar wrote...

Sarah1281 wrote...

Raonar wrote...

Since I really dislike Bhelen, I approve of the chapter

Seriously though, it was well written. I submitted a review full of my ramblings already, I hope you don't take it the wrong way.

I knew you thought that some people were a little too confident of Bhelen's abilities even if he is the dwarven messiah but I honestly wouldn't have guessed that you disliked him. Maybe it'll become clearer when he shows up in your story again.

Of couse, after not crowning him myself I'm sure people who aren't on the BSN would be surprised to find out that I'm a fan.

Whan I said i disliked him, I was being nice.

It's actually sad that so many people worship him. I mean, he's a murderer AND a spoiled brat at the same time. And he only got as far as he did because his last name happened to be Aeducan. Also, those people that keep saying how he was better than Endrin are more or less naive.

Even Branka thought Endrin was better, and that's saying something.

As for my own story, I'll jsut say that there will be many, many conflicting feelings.

EDIT

Well, at least I won't have to choose between Bhelen and Harrowmont since my protagonist will make someone else king... more or less.  

I don't think Branka went that far. She just said Endrin was competent and Bhelen was corrupt enough to go places.  And more or less? Why aren't you back in Orzammar yet?!?!

EDIT 2
And about the Twilight deal with Bella... She DOES have a redeemeing quality. She smells tasty.

I dislike twilight BTW

  Like bacon.

[Raonar]

Sorry, I know I'm taking long, but I might just make it in time for Christmas. No promises though. I can, of course, assure you that It'll be worth the wait. At least i think it will.

[soignee]

Shadow of Light Dragon wrote...

People tend to make a lot of assumptions about an author based on the Warden they happen to have been writing about.

No clue what people associate me with. Shouty dwarf lady? Probably.

I do put my own thoughts and experiences into what I write though, maybe everyone does. For research for my Mahariel I've been talking to my parents a lot about their experiences with their culture. Mum is/was* romany gypsy and my dad country working class, so I've been listening to their stories as inspiration for what I perceive the Dalish culture to be. 

All these family stories of poachers, game keepers, hedgewitches, gypsy curses... Ha, maybe I should just write a book about that, instead of lolfanfic. I find writing my M!Mahariel hard though. Not because he is male, but because he is harder to predict for.

____
*yeah it's a long story and tied to the culture, you know how it is <.<

[Sarah1281]

So, do you guys remember that negative reaction I was worried about yesterday? I finally got it.

[mousestalker]

Don't let it get to you. He's complaining, but apparently he's also reading it. I think you've gotten to him.

[LupusYondergirl]

You can't seem to type five words without him finding a reason to complain, though. Seriously, it's like he just reads so he can complain.

He's... special like that, apparently.



I would totally, completely ignore it.