The_KFD_Case wrote...
mothbanquet wrote...
The_KFD_Case wrote...
D'oh!
Out in the cold, I see. And here I was about to praise you for the FF you have written.....Oh well. *smug, tight smile*
.......I hate myself now 
Fret not! I realise I had actually read your first FF entry a day or two ago and now I'm reading your second one. I realise that to really work with any critique - constructive or otherwise - you need tangible details. I am however feeling a bit drained at the moment and really just want to state that in my ever-so-humble-opinion you have done a tremendous job. In particular I am impressed with the level of detail you go in to with both the character's expressions, their thoughts and feelings and also the environment and equipment around them. I imagine your current profession has its benefits in regards to detailing weaponry. Well done!
See, now that makes it all worthwhile.
Needless to say my more 'frenetic' experiences will be put to good use when the action picks up, which is why I'm interested in doing a bit of Geth/Quarian war fiction, maybe do a Band of Brothers inspired tale for the Migrant Fleet Marines. So many ideas, so little time...
Ah well, Part III will do for now