Kabraxal wrote...
jtav wrote...
Really, Kab? When did you want to slap or hug her? I like hearing what parts affected people.
Have to admit, getting feedback here takes some getting used to. I'm used to getting review alerts in my inbox.
The moment in chapter one where she is appalled... cheered (of course). Her attitude with Jack... grr, **** went low! Snapping back into "yay Cerberus" at the end of chapter one... *slaps*.
The whole second chapter was just the build up of "how could you be so stupid to swallow the lies" ... *slap*...and of course followed by "i want to hug you" when Miri was in shock. The lines when she thinks she is about to die are nice though. I liked the sense of loss she was feeling.
Thanks. Cut the poor girl some slack, her extremely fragile self-concept is bound up in her usefulness to Cerberus. She's kind of tragic here: she has multiple chances to turn back, but she didn't take them and gets pretty broken. I think I did succeed in setting up her resignation quite nicely.




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