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[Tatooine92]

Joisan wrote...

Tatooine92 wrote...

A tub? Nay. A SHOWER!

You have seen Legbamel's "The Commander Takes a Shower" right?  It involves sneaking on to the SR2 and a sexy shower interlude.

Show it.  Now.  Please?

[stardust923]

Shenzi wrote...

stardust923 wrote...

Shenzi wrote...

Is anyone avaiable for a grammer proof read? I just finished up chapter 4 on my fic.

If you want an extra person to proofread, I have some time to look over it right now.  I've really enjoyed the story so far, by the way.  

Sent you a link as well

Replied.  Changes in red, with a few explanatory comments as well.  Hope it makes sense!

[*Kioux*]

Tatooine92 wrote...

Joisan wrote...

Tatooine92 wrote...

A tub? Nay. A SHOWER!

You have seen Legbamel's "The Commander Takes a Shower" right?  It involves sneaking on to the SR2 and a sexy shower interlude.

Show it.  Now.  Please?

The Commander takes a Shower

[Jhourney]

heh...love shower fics but um...we burned all towels, there's no hiding!

[*Kioux*]

Jhosephine wrote...

heh...love shower fics but um...we burned all towels, there's no hiding!

I am currently buying extra towels - or have them made. Why? Because I'd love to peel them off...

[stardust923]

Jhosephine wrote...

Would prefer it the other way around I think...Kaidan reaching for Shepard. Hmm, who will take initiative to mend the relationship? It's been said Kaidan might actively go after Shepard so I'm hopeful..but still...

This is something I've wondered... How do you think Kaidan and Shepard will reunite in ME3?  If you were the one writing it, how would you have them reunite?  

[Tatooine92]

Jhosephine wrote...

heh...love shower fics but um...we burned all towels, there's no hiding!

Aha!  I knew it.  Very well.  They shall hide in bedsheets.

[Joisan]

Okay, Shenzi, proofread finished

[Jhourney]

stardust923 wrote...

Jhosephine wrote...

Would prefer it the other way around I think...Kaidan reaching for Shepard. Hmm, who will take initiative to mend the relationship? It's been said Kaidan might actively go after Shepard so I'm hopeful..but still...

This is something I've wondered... How do you think Kaidan and Shepard will reunite in ME3?  If you were the one writing it, how would you have them reunite?  

I wrote up this scenario in version 1 of the Kaidan threads but don't recall it completely anymore. But I did see similiar scenes in various fics

Shepard in her cabin, going over some stuff or checking mail whatever. EDI breaking the silence to announce the arrival of the Alliance liaison. Shepard tells EDI to send him up and in walks Kaidan. Shepard breathlessly says his name (like she does in the Thane romance scene), never expecting he was the liaison. Kaidan looks all brooding, takes on this professional attitude, rather reserved and unpersonal but as he walks forward his head pans to the right just briefly, back again and then jerks to the right once more when he realises that's his picture sitting on Shepard's desk.

After that I don't recall what happened but at one point a dialogue wheel will appear in which you can confirm the romance or end it.
I wrote it down a lot better before, but can't find the words now and I am not going back like a 1000 pages to find it hehe..but you get the idea

Modifié par Jhosephine, 23 avril 2010 - 07:46 .

[Tatooine92]

Jhosephine wrote...

stardust923 wrote...

Jhosephine wrote...

Would prefer it the other way around I think...Kaidan reaching for Shepard. Hmm, who will take initiative to mend the relationship? It's been said Kaidan might actively go after Shepard so I'm hopeful..but still...

This is something I've wondered... How do you think Kaidan and Shepard will reunite in ME3?  If you were the one writing it, how would you have them reunite?  

I wrote up this scenario in version 1 of the Kaidan threads but don't recall it completely anymore. But I did see similiar scenes in various fics

Shepard in her cabin, going over some stuff or checking mail whatever. EDI breaking the silence to announce the arrival of the Alliance liaison. Shepard tells EDI to send him up and in walks Kaidan. Shepard breathlessly says his name (like she does in the Thane romance scene), never expecting he was the liaison. Kaidan looks all brooding, takes on this professional attitude, rather reserved and unpersonal but as he walks forward his head pans to the right just briefly, back again and then jerks to the right once more when he realises that's his picture sitting on Shepard's desk.

After that I don't recall what happened but at one point a dialogue wheel will appear in which you can confirm the romance or end it.
I wrote it down a lot better before, but can't find the words now and I am not going back like a 1000 pages to find it hehe..but you get the idea

Omg!  Jho!  That's BEAUTIFUL!

[stardust923]

Jhosephine wrote...

stardust923 wrote...

This is something I've wondered... How do you think Kaidan and Shepard will reunite in ME3?  If you were the one writing it, how would you have them reunite?  

I wrote up this scenario in version 1 of the Kaidan threads but don't recall it completely anymore. But I did see similiar scenes in various fics

Shepard in her cabin, going over some stuff or checking mail whatever. EDI breaking the silence to announce the arrival of the Alliance liaison. Shepard tells EDI to send him up and in walks Kaidan. Shepard breathlessly says his name (like she does in the Thane romance scene), never expecting he was the liaison. Kaidan looks all brooding, takes on this professional attitude, rather reserved and unpersonal but as he walks forward his head pans to the right just briefly, back again and then jerks to the right once more when he realises that's his picture sitting on Shepard's desk.

After that I don't recall what happened but at one point a dialogue wheel will appear in which you can confirm the romance or end it.
I wrote it down a lot better before, but can't find the words now and I am not going back like a 1000 pages to find it hehe..but you get the idea

Oh, I like that!  I can really see something like that happening, it makes sense that the Alliance might pick Kaidan as their liaison since he's worked with Shepard and the Normandy before.  

[RyrineaNara]

Hi ladies

[Tatooine92]

RyrineaNara wrote...

Hi ladies

Hi!

[Joisan]

Off to D&D (I'm pretty sure)



Talk to you guys later!

[*Kioux*]

Joisan wrote...

Off to D&D (I'm pretty sure)

Talk to you guys later!

I hope with little epic fails and plenty of success or high open ends (been forever since I played D&D - don't know if they have high open ends)
Anyway, enjoy!

[Joisan]

Unfortunately our DM canceled again tonight. Hadn't checked my phone lately for the final yes/no, which is why I said "I'm pretty sure". And you want epic? Read my post in my deviantart journal about our last session!

[Jhourney]

stardust923 wrote...
Oh, I like that!  I can really see something like that happening, it makes sense that the Alliance might pick Kaidan as their liaison since he's worked with Shepard and the Normandy before.  

Okay officially hate myself because I DID go back to version 1 of the Kaidan threads to check what I wrote, was shorter than I recalled but had to find it otherwise I just can't sleep. I'm weird like that.

Anywho...this is the quote

Jhosephine wrote...
*snip since it's the same as my previous post*

Shepard then tells EDI to send the liaison up. Scene trigger with Kaidan entering her quarters, all business and stern looking. He looks around, pans his head to the right, looks at her again. And if you've stayed loyal in ME2 and his picture is on your desk still, his head jerks to the right again and he's caught offguard by the evidence of Shepard's love.

Awkward dialogue ensues, Kaidan probably comments on the size of the cabin, the fish and whatnot, they smile a bit uncomfortably and then he's back to business and wants to settle in at his post. He states they will have to talk
sometime, walks away and Shep gets a dialogue wheel. At that point you can confirm your relationship, keep the option open or end it all together by telling him the past is the past etc. Kaidan freezes at the spot for a few seconds before continuing onwards no matter the answer,  just to acknowledge he heard you

Calling it a night now...hehe...nn

Modifié par Jhosephine, 23 avril 2010 - 08:23 .

[Joisan]

I'd love that! Except there should be a paragon hug/smooch interrupt in there somewhere!

[*Kioux*]

Joisan wrote...

Unfortunately our DM canceled again tonight. Hadn't checked my phone lately for the final yes/no, which is why I said "I'm pretty sure". And you want epic? Read my post in my deviantart journal about our last session!

Meh, sorry to hear that they cancelled it. I've noticed yu had something up on DArt, I just didn't get arond to read it yet. I'm currently having a tiny battle with my creativity while we try to agree on a few thing in Chapter 6.
When they settle down a bit, my urge for music starts to debate which song of Shinedown I like best at the moment... merh... skipping between 3 taps... music and writing... yay.

[*Kioux*]

Jhosephine wrote...
Calling it a night now...hehe...nn

Night Jho - sleep well

[Shenzi]

Just put up chapter 4 of  Just Because Horizon Was That Bloody Awful.
Much Love (NH) to Jo, Stardust and Ki for being my betas for this chapter.  

[Shenzi]

Jhosephine wrote...

stardust923 wrote...
Oh, I like that!  I can really see something like that happening, it makes sense that the Alliance might pick Kaidan as their liaison since he's worked with Shepard and the Normandy before.  

Okay officially hate myself because I DID go back to version 1 of the Kaidan threads to check what I wrote, was shorter than I recalled but had to find it otherwise I just can't sleep. I'm weird like that.

Anywho...this is the quote

Jhosephine wrote...
*snip since it's the same as my previous post*

Shepard then tells EDI to send the liaison up. Scene trigger with Kaidan entering her quarters, all business and stern looking. He looks around, pans his head to the right, looks at her again. And if you've stayed loyal in ME2 and his picture is on your desk still, his head jerks to the right again and he's caught offguard by the evidence of Shepard's love.

Awkward dialogue ensues, Kaidan probably comments on the size of the cabin, the fish and whatnot, they smile a bit uncomfortably and then he's back to business and wants to settle in at his post. He states they will have to talk
sometime, walks away and Shep gets a dialogue wheel. At that point you can confirm your relationship, keep the option open or end it all together by telling him the past is the past etc. Kaidan freezes at the spot for a few seconds before continuing onwards no matter the answer,  just to acknowledge he heard you

Calling it a night now...hehe...nn

YES!  This would be perfect.

[*Kioux*]

LiamN7 wrote...

I had to go back like 7 or 8 pages before I hit a shirtless Kaidan pic. That just seemed odd.
Isn't their something in your Bylaws about that. It just seems abnormal for this thread.

Rectified!!