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alickar wrote...
no advice for blog improvment *sighs*alickar wrote...
bye everyone whose leaving
Okay, um. . .
1) You have some stray BCC code in there that needs to be cleaned up.
2) I don't understand why the whole thing is blue. It just makes it harder to read and seems pointless.
3) There are several grammar errors, which I'm not really so strict about, but several are very obvious mistakes.
4) It's written more like a script than a story.
5) You're first chapter is only one paragraph. There's no discription, no build up or drama; basicly nothing that would catch someone's interest. Also what you do have is very erratic. There is no 'flow' to it which can be distracting.
Now, I'm not saying you can't get better. My first stories are so bad that I actully burned them so no one would ever see them agian.
The best suggestion I can give you is to read other fan fiction (or published stories) and really look at how they are structured, the grammar and spelling, as well as how they are written.
Everyone has their own style, you just need to find your own.
You'll get better with time, but only if you really try and really want to learn.
Modifié par cannedcream, 11 mars 2010 - 06:05 .
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