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Full story is here: www.fanfiction.net/s/5802946/1/Galion_the_Grey

I thought I'd post this for anyone interested.  A few quick notes first.  These are my working notes that I have when I am writing a story to make sure I don't wander off too much.

Dalish Mage Male Warden:  Galion Mahariel  -- Galion is a Tolkien name, butler for Tharanduil king of the elves in Mirkwood.
Spell focus = light, nature, healing.

Spell list for light
Handlight - casts beam of light from hand, like a torch.
Stafflight - staff has a light source on top of it. (maintained spell)
Sunbeam - projects powerful light forwards.  Used to dazzle creatures I think?
Nova - caster is surrounded by a sphere of intense light which travels outwards.
Searing Blast - thin but white hot beam of light is projected outwards (like a laser bolt).
Flare - a summoned flare is shot at a target (like a throw down flare or dropped torch, lasts 5 or 10 minutes).

Spell list for nature
Entangle - roots emerge and tangle the feet of anything caught inside.
Stranglevine - vines emerge from the ground and target necks, strangling if given enough time.
Grease - as in DAO
Flourish - causes a burst of plant growth using mana. Can make edible fruit, grain etc.
Rockbreaker - roots and tendrils rip apart target (similar to the way roots can break rock given enough time).
Earthquake - as DAO

Spell list for healing
Minor heal - as DAO
Major (party) heal as DAO
Restore part (eg fix amputation)
Organ mastery - control over major organs in a body. Can be used offensively against things like lungs and heart to kill foes.
Bone mastery - control of bone structures in a body. Includes knitting together, fusing and breaking. Can be used offensively (eg leg break).
Cleanse blood - poison, disease and clot nullification.
Skin mastery - heals skin - bruises, cuts, seals wounds, rashes and infections, burn removal. Hair regeneration.

Dalish keeper apprentice. Similar rank to Merrill but much more focused on his schools of magic.  About 25.  Looks like my brother Ian. Has made advanced studies of elven lore and literature. Has good knowledge of the elven language.

Synopsis: Galion is of equal 'rank' as Merrill, but a much more potent healer than even the keeper. He is called by Tamlen to help retrieve the regular Grey Warden candidate who has busted her leg and fallen down a cliff or something equally stupid. Tamlen, Galion and Merrill recover the PC and he heals her leg, but orders Merrill to take her back to camp while he and Tamlen go ahead to check out the ruins.  After that it is pretty much a standard Dalish start.

Timeline: Recruit - Ostagar - Lothering - Mages - Orzammar - Redcliffe - Denerim - Urn - Dalish - Denerim / Landsmeet - Finale.

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Part 1

Galion sat beside the aravel with a scroll on his lap.  He had been working on a transcription of an elven calendar for one of the other Dalish clans.  The Keeper recognised his aptitude for the written arts and encouraged him to perform these sort of tasks.  Although Merrill was still the Keepers' second, Galion was developing into a powerful mage in his own right.  He did not share the Keepers' confidence, as he knew that his spellcraft desperately needed rounding out.  His repertoire, while limited, was powerful enough that the Keeper kept him busy honing those spells while not leaving time to broaden his skills.
He sighed and looked back down to his scroll.  This should be finished shortly, then he would go and find Merrill and maybe they could sneak off somewhere for lunch.  He bent back to his work, carefully blocking in the last couple of dates on the page.
A shadow fell across him and he looked up to see Tamlen, one of the hunters, panting to catch his breath.
"Tamlen?  What's the matter?" he asked.
"Galion" gasped Tamlen, sucking in lungfuls of air "it's Lyna.  She's fallen off the edge of a path in the forest.  I think her leg's broken, and she's passed out!" he gasped.
"How far is she?  When did this happen?" asked Galion, putting the scroll on the ground and standing up.
"About half an hour ago, I can show you where.  Can you come help me?"
"Of course I can, Tamlen.  We should get Merrill and some rope" he thought out loud.
Galion picked up the scroll and put it in the aravel nearby.  He and Tamlen found a good length of rope, and they found Merrill over by the halla pen with the Keeper. 
Tamlen quickly filled Galion, Merrill and the Keeper in on what had happened. 
Tamlen and Lyna had been out hunting when they found three humans.  They claimed to have found a cave with treasure in it.  They were looking for treasure when they were scared off by something which they descibed as a monster.  Tamlen and Lyna let the humans leave, and found their way down to the cave.  They were coming back to see the Keeper when Lyna slipped and fell down the unfamiliar path.  Before she fainted, Tamlen told her he was going for help.
The Keeper looked at the younger elves and said "bring her back to us.  Tamlen, if Lyna is not badly hurt then can you lead Galion down to the ruins and have him look for anything useful there".
Tamlen nodded and looked at Galion, who said "we should hurry, then".

The three elves rapidly made their way into the forest, Tamlen leading the way.  After about half an hour they came to the place where Lyna had gone over the edge.  Tamlen carefully peeked over the edge and he shook his head.  "Lyna!" he yelled.  There was no response.
Galion looped the rope around a sturdy looking tree and flung the coils over the edge.
"I'll go first" said Tamlen.
"No" said Galion, passing his staff to Merrill. "If her leg is broken then it is better to heal it down there".
Tamlen nodded in understanding.
Galion clambered down the rope while Merrill and Tamlen steadied it for him.  When he reached the bottom he was able to see the extent of Lyna's injuries.  She had indeed broken her leg, and she had quite a few scrapes and bruises from her fall.  Most worrying for Galion was the egg sized lump on her forehead.  He knelt down beside her and carefully placed his hands beside her head, gingerly feeling for a wound.  Satisfied, he cast a healing spell on her head and watched the lump shrink and dissappear.  He moved down to her leg and made a tsk, tsk sound.  Her left leg was sitting at a crazy angle to the rest of her body, but only below the knee.  "Hmm" he thought "dislocated ankle as well as broken leg.  Marvellous".
He passed a hand over her broken leg and knitted the bones back together.  He cast a second time to reduce internal bleeding around the break.  Muttering a brief prayer, he pulled the leg straight and with a practiced action, slid the ankle back to where it should be with a satisfying crunch.  He cast another healing spell over the ankle to reduce the swelling and help the tendons to get themselves back in the right place.
Galion looked up to see Tamlen just visible over the edge of the road.  He bent back down to Lyna and unclipped his water skin.  He knelt beside Lyna and propped her up.  Gently he slapped the back of her hand to wake her.  After a few slaps her eyes shot open and her hazel eyes were staring at Galion's light green eyes.
"Galion?" she said "what are you doing here?  We were coming back to the camp and... and"
"You fell" said Galion.  "Look up there" he said, pointing at the rope.
Lyna followed the direction he was indicating and saw Tamlen waving frantically.  She grinned and waved back.  "What happened?" she asked.
"You broke your leg, few cuts and scrapes, concussion.  You were out cold for probably an hour, Tamlen says.  Here, drink some water" said Galion.
"Ma serannas, Galion" said Lyna.
"You're going to be tired for the next couple of days, Lyna, and hungry too" said Galion.  "Let's see if you can stand, I'll help you".
Galion stood and grabbed both of Lyna's hands, carefully pulling her up to her feet.  He backed away, but remained holding her hands.  "How does it feel?" he asked.
Lyna tested her legs.  Crouched.  Stomped both feet.  Jumped.  "You're an amazing healer, Galion!" she grinned, sweeping the bemused mage into a friendly hug.  Galion smiled and patted Lyna on the back, returning the hug. 
"Nice though this is, we should get back up to the road" he said, breaking the embrace.  "You go first.  Be careful, I don't want you to fall and I have to fix you again" he said with a grin.
Lyna smiled and grabbed onto the rope, and with practiced ease, hoisted herself up the cliff in a very short time.  Galion picked up his water skin and took a swig before climbing back up to the road.
Tamlen grabbed him as he approached the top and hoisted him over the edge.  He was grinning from ear to ear, and clapped Galion on the back.  Merrill took one of Galions' hands and looked at the palm, rubbing it with her thumbs, then hugged Galion.
"Wow, a lot of attention!  Lyna, you should fall off cliffs more often, I could get to like this" said Galion, putting an arm around Merrill's shoulders.  Lyna picked up Galion's staff and handed it to him.
"We should decide what to do, Galion" said Merrill.
"Tamlen and I should have a quick look in these ruins, I suppose.  Lyna you should probably go back with Merrill to the camp.  You're alright now but those spells I cast will kick in soon and you will be exhausted."
"I wanted to have a look at these ruins myself, Galion" said Merrill.
"It will have to be another time, lethallin" said Galion, giving Merrill a peck on the cheek as he moved over towards Tamlen, who had wound up the rope and slung the coils over his shoulder.
Merrill nodded, moving towards the red headed Lyna.  The two groups went their separate ways.

Tamlen and Galion made their way down to the cave and looked inside.  They looked at each other and Galion shrugged.  "Let's take a look" he said. 
As they made their way into the cave, they noticed that there appeared to be a structure ahead, but it was difficult to see with all the broken rocks and dust.  Galion stopped and cast a short spell and the end of his staff burst with a white light.
"That's useful.  How long will that last?" asked Tamlen.
"As long as I need it to" said Galion.
They found a hole further in which was made in a stone wall.  This structure must have been very old, for it to be buried like this.  As the clambered through the hole and dropped down to the floor, they saw there were a few directions they could take.
"If we tie the rope off here, we can use it like a trail marker in case we get lost" suggested Galion.
"Good idea, lethallan.  We'll head this way.  I suppose all directions are equally unknown" said Tamlen.
After a short time the elves came across thick cobwebs.  Tamlen drew his sword and Galion was on his guard.  They heard the sqealing of a cluster of spiders before they saw them.  Tamlen skewered the first one, while Galion cast a spell which caused roots to emerge from the ground and snare the nasty arachnids.  Concentrating on one spider, Galion cast a white hot beam of light across his target, which sliced through spider flesh, leaving an acrid smoke and foul stench behind.  Tamlen moved to a trapped spider and lopped off some legs before slicing open the abdomen, jumping gracefully to avoid being washed in yellow goo.  Tamlen stabbed through the head of the disabled spider, while Galion used another spell to cause the roots below the last spider to wrap around it, quickly crushing it into paste.
Galion looked at Tamlen and shrugged. "Let's keep going" he said.
Tamlen led the way, unwinding the rope coils as they went.  As they rounded a corner, they saw statues lining a hall.  Some looked like elven prayer markers, and others were of human style.  "Maybe these are Tevinter statues?  How odd that they're side by side with elven ones" said Galion.  As they ventured further along, they came to an alcove where an ornate door led off from the hallway they had followed.  Tamlen stopped Galion with a hand on his chest.  He pointed to a plate on the ground, almost undetectable at a casual glance.  Making his way to the edge of the plate, he found some bits of gravel and twigs and rammed them underneath, blocking the plate.  Having disarmed the trap, he found a lever that opened the ornate door.

The two elves entered the chamber and saw a hideous beastie.  It looked like a cross between a sea urchin and a grizzly bear that had been rolled in rotting meat.  Tamlen drew his sword and Galion readied a spell as the creature charged towards them.  Galion tried to tangle the creature with some roots but the spell fizzled out.  Tamlen struck it across the snout, which temporarily stunned it, giving him time to line up a shot which hobbled one of its' front legs.  Enraged, the creature let out a roar which knocked Tamlen over.  Galion cast his beam of light but he could not get a good shot for fear of hitting Tamlen.  However he was able to slice off a pillow sized lump of flank, which crippled the creature still further.  Galion kicked it in the arse to draw its' attention away from Tamlen.  The creature turned around and lumbered towards the mage, as Tamlen scrambled to his feet and recovered his sword.  Galion backpedalled away from the weakening creature, allowing Tamlen to aim a slice towards the backbone, cutting deep but hitting the spine and not going through.  His sword was now embedded in the creature, which bucked and kicked backwards, knocking Tamlen back down.  The creature span and rose up on it's back legs, preparing to squish Tamlen.  As he watched, horrified, a cracking sound could be heard and he felt the ground move.  Mighty roots pushed up through the stone and wrapped around the creature, pinning it in an upright position.  It flailed about but could not break free.  Galion darted around the creature and helped Tamlen up.  He helped him over to cover behind a slab of stone, then cast a healing spell on the creature.  The result was a spectacular explosion of gore, as shards of bone crystallised outwards, piercing the flesh in thousands of different locations.
"What was that!" said Tamlen.
"That was me casting a bone healing spell for a mouse onto that thing.  The bones try to grow into a mouse shape, they crack and splinter and well you can see what happens next" said Galion.  "What I want to know is what it is.  I've never seen anything like it."
"It looks a bit like a bear, but diseased and spiky" said Tamlen.  He walked over and pulled his sword free.
The elves looked through the room and found there was only one door leading further into the building.  Opening the door they saw a raised stone dais that had a large silver edged mirror on it.  The mirror was ornate and undamaged, despite the disrepair of the surrounding rooms.
Galion felt a dreadful sense of misery and pain emanating from the mirror, like ripples in a pond.  Tamlen took a few steps in, to get a better look.
"I don't think you should mess with that mirror, Tamlen.  Can't you feel the evil coming from it?" asked Galion.
"I'll be quick, Galion.  I just want a look" he replied.  "Can you translate the writing around the edge?"
"Its' not elvish, Tamlen.  I can't.  I'm also not going near that thing.  Ugh, it's making me feel sick!" replied Galion.
"Hey!  Something's in there!  I just saw something moving in there!" said Tamlen.
"It's a mirror, Tamlen, it's just your reflection or the light from my staff" said Galion.
"No, there's something there... look, there it is again!  Can you feel that?  I think it saw me!" said Tamlen. 
An almighty sucking noise and a stink of sulphur emanated from the mirror, followed by a burst of light and a concussion blast, knocking Galion onto his bum in the doorway.  Tamlen was nowhere to be seen.  Galion felt as if his insides were rotting away, or as if he had just drunk some acid.  He felt consciousness slipping away and with a last mighty effort he cast a heal spell on himself, in an effort to at least slow whatever was happening to him down.

After an unknown length of time, Galion woke up to see a bearded human hovering over his face.  The human spoke "I'm very sorry."
"The mirror.  Tamlen in the mirror" said Galion.
"Who is Tamlen, a friend of yours?" asked the human.
"Yes - in the mirror - follow our rope trail, end of the rope in a room..." and with that Galion surrendered to unconsciousness.

---End Pt.1---

OK, from here the story should pick up from where Duncan and the Dalish are ready to leave.  There wouldn't need to be a return trip to the mirror, I was going to have Duncan break it because he knew where it was.  So he would have gone in, smashed the mirror, brought Galion back to camp, got him patched up and then recruited him.

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Lyna was dozing under a tree while Merrill was sitting beside her, looking towards the path that led down into the forest.  They noticed Fenarel coming along the path towards them with a human alongside.  Between the two of them, unconscious, was Galion.  Merrill leapt up, bumping Lyna and waking her up.  Merrill ran towards Fenarel and the human, worry crossing her face as she looked at the unconscious mage.  She felt his neck for a pulse.  His skin was hot and flushed.  "We'll need to take him to the Keeper" she said. 
Fenarel grunted and together with the human they carried Galion to the Keeper's aravel and laid him on a cot. 
The elderly keeper fired off quick questions. "What has happened?  Fenarel, who is this human?  What happened to Galion?"
Fenarel answered "I was guarding the path and Duncan here came from further in the forest, carrying Galion.  Duncan is a Grey Warden.  He can probably explain the rest better than I can".
Duncan looked at the Keeper and gave her a bow.  "I am Duncan of the Grey Wardens.  I happened across your clansman here while I was looking in a ruins for a tainted artefact.  He was able to tell me where it was, and I have destroyed it.  Unfortunately the taint within the artefact must have been released by someone and it has infected your friend here."
The Keeper frowned at Duncan "how did you come to be looking for this artefact?"
"As a warden I am able to sense the taint, and I noticed it in this area a few days ago.  It is similar to smelling a distant campfire on a still day.  You can't see it, but you know it's there."
The Keeper seemed to consider this for a moment before saying "there will be time for questions later.  Merrill, you will help me here.  Fenarel and Lyna, see that the Grey Warden is looked after." 
Fenarel and Lyna stepped back from the aravel, allowing Duncan to climb down.
"Duncan, I must ask that you remain with us while I tend to Galion.  I will need to speak to you after" said the Keeper.
"As you wish" replied Duncan.
 
As sunset approached, Merrill emerged from the aravel, looking tired and drawn out.  She found Fenarel and Lyna sitting with Duncan by a crackling fire.  Lyna looked up as she approached.  "How is he?" she asked.
"He's responding to the magic, but this taint has a strong grip on him.  We're lucky that you found him when you did, Duncan" said Merrill, nodding towards the Warden.
"He must be strong indeed.  Your friends were telling me he has training as a mage?" said Duncan.
"Yes, he's an apprentice as I am" said Merrill.
"I believe that he was able to heal himself as the taint took hold, which gave him a few hours grace" stated Duncan.  "Is the keeper ready to see me?" he asked.
"I believe so.  Take some hot water with you, the Keeper asked for it" said Merrill.
Duncan retrieved a pan of hot water from beside the fire, while Merrill helped herself to some soup and sat down near Fenarel to eat.  Duncan entered the aravel with the water for the Keeper.
"How is he really?" asked Fenarel.
"It's bad.  It is like he has a fever except there is no response from our normal healing spells.  The Keeper is going to try to give him Lyrium when he wakes, because he may be able to cure himself" whispered Merrill.  She looked despondently at her soup, pushing the contents around with her spoon.
Lyna put her hand on her friend's shoulder and gave it a squeeze.  Merrill looked up and saw the black marks under her eyes.  "You should get some rest, Lyna.  He'll be alright in the morning, you'll see" said Merrill.
"I can't help but think about Tamlen.  I mean if Galion is sick with this taint, then Tamlen must be in poorer shape" said Lyna.
"Duncan looked around and didn't find anyone else.  Poor Tamlen is gone" said Fenarel.
"Tomorrow we should go back and have another look, Fenarel" said Lyna, getting up and stretching.  She walked off to the aravel she shared with Merrill and Maren, the halla keeper.
Fenarel watched as Merrill ate her soup, occasionally tossing another stick on the fire.  Every so often he would look towards the aravel where his friend was being cared for.  Merrill finished her soup and stood up, then went to clean up her bowl nearby.  She walked back to Fenarel and said "I'm going to get some sleep.  Did you have a place for Duncan?"
"He has set a tent up over there" said Fenarel, gesturing over his shoulder.  "I'll wait a bit longer.  Sleep well" said Fenarel.

The following morning Merrill woke early and slipped out of the aravel quietly.  She took a deep breath of the crisp morning air, then made her way down to the stream to have a quick wash.  After her morning ablutions she made her way back up to the Keepers' aravel.  She gently tapped the door, and the Keeper said "come in".
Inside Merrill found that Galion was still lying on the cot, but he was sleeping now rather than unconscious.  His skin had returned to its normal shade.  She put her hand just above his forehead and noticed that the fever from the previous day seemed to have abated.  The Keeper looked at Merrill and quietly said "he is resting now.  Not long after Duncan came in last night, he woke up.  We were able to give him some Lyrium and he was able to heal himself.  He slept after that and his fever broke a couple of hours later". 
"Is he cured then?" asked Merrill.
"I'm afraid not.  If what Duncan says is correct - and I believe him, by the way - then Galion has become infected with the darkspawn taint.  His cure relies on him becoming a Grey Warden.  Once he is awake, I am afraid that he will have to leave us, to travel with Duncan to recieve the cure".
Merrill looked down at her friend with sadness.  "Will he ever come back?" she asked.
"I don't know, da'len.  I don't know" replied the Keeper.
While Merrill fetched some food for herself and the Keeper, Galion rested.  Gradually he woke up, his eyelids fluttering open.  He sat up and looked at Merrill and the Keeper, sitting close by, watching him.  "Ugh.  Thirsty" he said.
Merrill grinned and handed him a cup with thin warm soup in it.  Galion took it and slowly drained the cup.
"It's good to see you well again, lethallin" said Merrill.
"Thanks Merrill.  I feel like I've been chewed up and spat out though" he replied.
"What happened to Tamlen?  I remember a human and a bear thing.  A mirror in the ruins too" he mumbled.
The Keeper stood up and said "Galion, the human was a Grey Warden.  He rescued you and he destroyed the mirror which infected you.  We haven't found Tamlen, and according to the Grey Warden, we are not likely to.  I fear we must assume the worst."
The Keeper stepped beside him and put her hand on his shoulder.  "Rest some more.  Merrill can stay with you" she said.  The Keeper stepped out of the aravel and left her two apprentices alone.
Galion motioned for Merrill to come and sit on the bed, and then held her in a comfortable hug.  Merrill sighed and closed her eyes, feeling the warmth of his body close to her own. 
Galion whispered "how long was I out?"
Merrill replied quietly "only half a day.  You had me worried, you know!"
Galion smiled, pulling back from the embrace to look at Merrill.  "I'm sorry Merrill.  If I had have known this would have happened, then I wouldn't have gone until all four of us were ready."
"But then there could have been four of us sick or lost instead of two.  Poor Tamlen.  The Grey Warden says he's gone" said Merrill sadly.
Galion gently stroked her cheek, tracing the filigree of her tattoo.  Merrill looked up at Galion, whose vallaslin matched the Keepers own design.  His light green eyes were bright, contrasting with his cornsilk blonde hair.  She leaned forward and gently brushed her lips against Galions', then drew him into a kiss, two friends trying to blot out a painful memory.

A couple of hours later, Galion and Merrill emerged from the Keeper's aravel.  Duncan was close by, and when he saw the mage, he immediately made his way over, looking the elf up and down.
"It's good to see you up and about so soon, friend" said Duncan.  "Your survival against the taint is partially due to your magical ability, I am led to understand."
"Thank you for rescuing me, Grey Warden.  It is a shame that you were not able to find a trace of Tamlen" replied Galion.
"I did look before I returned to you, after destroying that mirror.  If I had left you much longer, then I fear that your clan would have been preparing a second funeral today.  It is a sad thing that has happened, but do not let it cause you to regret being alive" he replied.
The Keeper walked over to join the conversation.  "Da'len. We must speak of your cure."
"Yes, Keeper.  I can still feel the sickness inside me.  It is like when you have eaten an unripe apple that makes your stomach knot, except it comes and goes" replied Galion.
"The cure for your ailment involves joining the Grey Wardens" said Duncan simply.
"You'd do that just to save my life?  I would not join out of charity" said Galion.
"You mistake me.  I wouldn't make the offer unless I thought you would make a good Grey Warden.  You are a skilled mage, and a Dalish as well.  The Dalish Grey Wardens have always served with distinction."
Galion looked up at the human with a questioning gaze.
"The last Grey Warden to slay an archdemon, Garahel, was a Dalish" said Duncan.
Galion asked "what is the cure?  Is it magical, or does it involve other Grey Wardens?"
"The cure involves a ritual, and yes some magic is involved.  Believe me when I say if I had the cure here I would give it to you immediately.  As it is, we will have to travel some distance to a place called Ostagar.  There I have some other recruits, as well as some of the ingredients needed to make the cure" said Duncan.
"Ostagar" replied Galion.
"Yes."
Galion paused for a moment, before asking the Keeper "what of the clan, Keeper?"
"We will be leaving da'len.  We head north, away from these darkspawn.  In time we may meet again, but for now our paths divide and you must go with Duncan, or else die from this taint - which has already taken Tamlen.  Please don't let his sacrifice be for nothing" said the Keeper.
Galion took a deep breath and said "very well Duncan.  I would be honoured to accept a place in the Grey Wardens".
"Then we should leave as soon as you are ready" he replied, with a small smile.

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I like it great job please write more.

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Thanks King Killoth!

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Added more. 8th March.

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Added second part over on fan fic site.

www.fanfiction.net/s/5802946/1/Galion_the_Grey

Modifié par Stuffy38, 18 mars 2010 - 04:57 .