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[Trooper Guy1]

 This is my first poem, it is about a Templar who fights against the Darkspawn and then find his true purpose.

I Lead, I Die, I Fade

I was given a duty to defend with sword and shield
So that there can be the spread of our Maker, our Lord
I was given a duty to lead the faithful men of the Chant
To inspire them so they never cry "I can't, I can't"
Now my duty leads me in campaign against those of the old

They came from the ones who went to the city of Gold
The ones who spread their corruption and left their mark
The magi who created our ultimate fear, the dark
I was given a duty to defeat the cruel spawn
Before the beautiful rise of the Maker's dawn

Now we stand in bloody fields with just our hope
We know our lives are hanging by threads, and not rope
Now we charge with our steel force faiths
Knowing we won't stand a chance against these evil wraiths

As I lay on the ground, sword still in my hand
I realized what the Maker had planned
Everything started to become unfurled
I was given a duty to protect another world
I was given a duty to fight the demons who attempt to rip the seams
Of all who walk within their peaceful dreams

Now as my brothers stand around me
I look back at them, with an enlightened glee
I know what I am to do
Over time, they will know too
I was given a duty, I was given a path
It was not to face the darkspawn's wrath

I am to go on a crusade, with nothing but my faith and blade
The forces of dark shall begin to degrade
They will be given a reason to become afraid
I will not be delayed, I will not be betrayed
I shall not waste time and lay under a shade
I shall not fill with greed and expect to be paid
I will not become some exhausted jade
This is the plan the Maker has made
And when the time comes for it, I shall be ready

This is my duty
And for now I stand waiting, vigilant, in the everlasting Fade.

There we go, Tell me what You Think!

Modifié par Trooper Guy1, 13 mars 2010 - 05:33 .

[Trooper Guy1]

 Bumping to let whoever even bothered to view it know I got everything worked out.

[Danielsun2]

thats a wonderful poem i love it

[Trooper Guy1]

Danielsun2 wrote...

thats a wonderful poem i love it

Thanks, this is somewhat of a lead toward a story I'm working on through the viewpoint of a Templar.

[Maximus741000]

A brilliant poem indeed, you've captured what it means to be a templar.

[MireliA]

If this is your first poem, you've done a great job

[Sisimka]

Really nice!

[Trooper Guy1]

 hahaah I just noticed near the end it sounds a little like Dr.Seuss with all the -ade ending, but I'm still satisfied. Also thanks for the comments guys and gals. I plan on either making another poem, or starting the story related to this particular poem.

[Sisimka]

I don't think it was Dr. Seuss, I liked that all the words fit together like that, it was a nice cadence in my head and I thought it was a really fitting way to end the poem.

[Trooper Guy1]

Sisimka wrote...

I don't think it was Dr. Seuss, I liked that all the words fit together like that, it was a nice cadence in my head and I thought it was a really fitting way to end the poem.

:happy: Yay. That's good then cause I wanted this to be a serious poem and I'm glad you think it fit well.

Also, I want more comments my fellow members. I need some responses so I know if I shall continue! 

[Maximus741000]

You don't need comments and feedback to guarantee that you can continue writing, just write for your own entertainment; because you enjoy it. Feedback is something that you get on the sides. Write because you want to, remember that.