Created a new species, so I could pull off the OC I wanted to use. Not that I hate the other races, they just didn't fit the character I had created, I made up the personality before picking the species, and realised it was a valid excuse to use the "Talinth" a race that resembles feline/human hybrids.
They were originally supposed to "debut" in my warcraft story, because that's where I first thought of them (and in the context of WoW, they didn't resemble any of the races with their "Asari-esque" traits) before I even heard of Mass Effect.
Summary I've used on FF.net->
She drew in a breath, and settled her sun-coloured gaze on the crying
Asari before her, "evil is a relative term; even a monster can have a
heart."
http://www.fanfictio...932238/1/Pariah
Now, it's supposed to be a drama/romance type fic, and I'm not really here to ram it down anyone's throat. I've merely edited this first post so people don't jab at me as much as they're already inclined to do.
{rant}
"Oh - there are so many holes! The Talinth are asari with fur! Your OC's a mary sue! You can't have another race of strong biotics that's overdoing it!" and the list will always go on because some people are actually trying to be helpful, and some people just enjoy jabbing at the writer for the sake of it.
All of those points are valid, when the writing is sh*t - if the story is done well, then those points aren't really that bad. It won't ruin your life and you know what the wonderful thing is? You don't have to read my story, but I would like it if you did and happened to enjoy it :innocent:
The Talinth are strong biotics, my OC is a strong biotic warrior, I gave her an old wound to stunt her ability to fight. Whilst most of you would consider a lung wound to be completely incapacitating, I stated that it will only cause her real trouble if she uses her biotics. She can still fight, but do it for too long and it'll have the same effect as using her biotics. The effect being it quickens the degradation of her lung tissue.
It was a chemical/gas used on her by an enemy clan that originated from a toxin on their homeworld. Left to its own devices the effected tissue will decay slowly, but the toxin reacts violently to biotics, hence why it stunts the OC's full potential.
So it's not like she can take on a platoon of mercs.
But if you're the type to flip out over details, or easily tear into something, piece of advice; take it with a pinch of salt.
Yes, the Talinth are similar to the Asari; but here's something - I made them before I heard about ME. I was playing Warcraft when I created them.
Their age was influenced by the Draenei, their magic(biotic) potential was influenced by the younger era of Kaldorei - and their appearance was influenced by my raging love of Naruto and the damn demon fox inside him. Their original appearance was humanoid Kyuubi FFS! That they were all female was already in my mind, but I hadn't figured out how they would mate, I left it up in the air just hanging there.
Besides, I thought it would be interesting for the Asari to realise there's a race with similar advantages to them, it would "threaten" their role as the dominant race as such. Not in an evil way mind you, just that they're damn comfortable up there with their political prowess, endless philosophy and time on their sides.
{/rant}
Anyway...*steps off soapbox*
Modifié par AshiraShepard, 01 mai 2010 - 11:35 .
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